Would be better growing up children in cities or in countryside?
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The recent years have seen the resurgence of the debate regarding dualism between cities and countryside, with a special attention for the issue of where bringing up children could be considered better. This question, in particular, is often approached with a too ideological position, which does not favour a rational reflection. The thesis of the essay is that there are certainly pros and cons related to each possibility.
Cities are, at first glance, a place where growing up children could not be assumed as a great idea.
The environment is, in general, extremely polluted and this has a consequence on the future health of them. Moreover, it could not be so easy moving from a place to another, for example for visiting a friend, because of distance and chaos, typical of big cities. Nevertheless, there are also some important benifts as, for instance, a wide range of educational activities – or simply leisure activities – which children can experiment like going to museum or having sport. Eventually, it should not be forgotten that the multicultural and international soul allow them to broaden horizons.
By contrast, countryside is a pollution-free world where children usually live without restrictions or difficulty of moving. Obviously, it can offer less opportunities than cities in terms of fun, however it can also be theatre of a different, in certain sense alternative, education. Surrounded by flora and fauna, the child can get in touch with the nature, besides learning how to use some work tools, thus experiencing a traditional lifestyle which, according to many, is also a more human one, although more isolated.
In conclusion, it appears clear that there is not a better environment where bringing up children. Either cities or countryside has positive and negative aspects and, probably, if this could be possible, the best choice would be combine both experiences.
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Would it be better growing up children in the city or in the countryside?
"Is it better to grow up in the city or the countryside?" would be better. Or "Is it better to raise children in the city or the countryside".
Good morning to everyone!
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This question, in particular, is often approached with a too ideological a position, which does not favour a rational reflection. The thesis of this the essay is that there are certainly pros and cons related to each possibility.
Cities are, at first glance, a place where growing up raising children could may not be considered as a great idea.
The environment is, in general, extremely polluted and this has a consequence on the their future health of them. Moreover, it could may not be as so easy for them to travel, moving from a place to another, for example, for when visiting a friend, because of the distance and disorder chaos, typical of big cities. Nevertheless, there are also some important benefits such as, for instance, a wide range of educational and leisure orsimply leisure activities with which children can experiment, like going to museum or playing a having sport. Finally Eventually, it should not be forgotten that the multicultural and foreign international soul influences allow them to broaden their horizons.
By contrast, the countryside is a pollution-free world where children usually live without restrictions or difficulty travelling of moving. (You could also say "or difficulty getting about") Obviously, it can offer less fewer opportunities than cities in terms of fun, however it can also be theatre of a different, in a certain sense alternative, education. I'm not quite sure what you mean by "theatre".
Surrounded by flora and fauna, the children can get in touch with the nature, besides as well as learn how to use some work tools, thus experiencing a traditional lifestyle which, according to many, is also a more human one, although more isolated.
In conclusion, it appears clear that there is no not a better ideal environment where to bringing up children. Either Both the city and the countryside has have positive and negative aspects. and, probably, if this could be If possible, the best choice would be to combine both experiences.
This is good and mostly well written. I think that where you have had trouble, in some places, is using the more formal language of an essay. Generally though, it's really good.
A few things I picked up on were:
- You have had some trouble with the definite/indefinite article ("the/a/an") in a few places.
- You need to use a possessive article when something belongs to someone. E.g. "their future health".
- When you talk abstractly about cities it is singular. "The city", when saying "city life" or "life in the city".
When writing an essay in English, shorter sentences are preferred. If you have a sentence longer than 20, or so, words, it's a good idea to try and break it up. For example, your first sentence could have a period after "between the city and the countryside". You can remove the "with" conjunction and start a new sentence: "Specifically whether...".
Hope this makes sense. Writing essays can be hard and it is a very different style to normal conversational language. You've done a good job.
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Would it be better growing up for children to grow up in cities or in the countryside?
Good morning to everyone!
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Cities are, at first glance, not considered to be a suitable place where growing up for children to grow up could not be assumed as a great idea.
The environment is, in general, extremely polluted and this could have has a consequence on their future health of them. Moreover, it could not be so easy moving travelling from a one place to another, for example to visit for visiting a friend, because of distance and chaos, which is typical of big cities. Nevertheless, there are also some important benifts benefits such as, for instance, a wide range of educational activities – or simply leisure activities – which children can experience, experiment like going to the museum or having doing sport. Eventually Ultimately, it should not be forgotten that the multicultural and international soul allows them to broaden their horizons.
By contrast, the countryside is a pollution-free world where children usually live without restrictions or difficulty to travel of moving. Obviously, it can offer less opportunities than cities in terms of fun, however it can also be a theatre of in a different way, in a certain sense alternative, and educational sense. Surrounded by flora and fauna, the children can get in touch with the nature, besides learning how to use some work tools, thus experiencing a traditional lifestyle which, according to many, is also a more human one, although more isolated.
In conclusion, it appears clear that there is not a better environment where for bringing up children. Either Both cities or and the countryside has have positive and negative aspects and, probably, if this could be possible, the best choice would be to combine both experiences.
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Hi Raffaele,
You bring up some great points, and I think it’s a topic most people struggle with. The city brings culture and excitement, while the countryside brings peace and room for growth. I think this is why many people are attracted to the idea of the “suburb”. A place that is close enough to the city, but still offers some quiet.
Julia :)
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