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Please correct my essay 🙏 Nowadays barely anyone has time to relax or enjoy, because most people are working or studying, but do we spend doing this too much? It is often said that creative activities like painting or pottering have lots of advantages because doing this, you can de- stress from your routine chores of your work or studies. And they also can be beneficial for keep your brain focus in your daily activities. Furthermore, if you are not so good at this, you can choose another interest. Sports and exercise are the favourite for most of us. You can go for a walk after your work or maybe join to a sport team, the key is to do something that you enjoy and spring the mind out of your responsibilities. There are no excuses, in spite of the fact that your work or studies are so hard, you can always find a moment for yourself, like for example go into nature and breath pure air. To sum up, work and studies are important in our lives, however, on balance, if you have hobbies and interests you will be more relax and productive in your routines.

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Please correct my essay 🙏

Nowadays barely anybody has time to relax or enjoy (life) because most people are working or studying, but do we spend too much time doing this?

It is often said that creative activities like painting or pottery have lots of advantages because if you do them, you can de- stress from your routine like your work or studies. And they also can be beneficial in keeping your brain focused in/during your daily activities.

Furthermore, if you are not so good at these activities, you can choose another interest. A lot of peoples favourite activities include sports and exercise .You can go for a walk after your work or maybe join to a sports team, the key is to do something that you enjoy and forget your responsiblities.

There are no excuses, despite the fact that your work or studies are so hard, you should always find a moment for yourself- go out into nature and breathe fresh air.

To sum up, work and studies are important in our lives, however, they should be balanced with hobbies and interests, that way you will be more relaxed and productive in your routines.

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This was really great!
I agree that we should try and balance our work and leisure lifestyle :)
It was mostly gramatically correct but I just tried to make it flow better and sound more authentic.
Have a nice day!
-Benita

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