About me
I need to training my writing. So, I will to try writing about anything (like me, my family, my preferences). I was born in a small city here in Brazil. I have a lot of dreams. One of them, is travelling to Japan. I hope that one day I go to Japan. I would like to go to Australia too. I imagine that is fantastic! Wow! Actually, I live in another city near to Rio de Janeiro. I love this city because there are many things to do there, like bars, parties, shoppings, squares and cafeterias. I don´t known very well Rio de Janeiro. I just known some places there like Ipanema beach. When I go to a restaurant, I ask for the menu. My favorite food is a salad. I love carrot, tomato, potato, corn, lettuce and other legumes. My favorite drink is a cup of orange juice. Sometimes I drink beer. Now I´m in my small city during quarentee. The people here are friendly, easygoing and sociable. There are six confirmed cases here of Covid-19. I´m afraid! But I believe that the researchers discovered a vaccine in the next future. I have one sister named Adriana. She is a pretty woman! She doesn´t speak English. She just speaks Portuguese. She has a cute son. So, that it is for today! Thanks a lot for attention with my writing!
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About me
I need to training my writing (Note 1). So, I will to try writing about anything (like me, my family, my preferences). I was born in a small city here in Brazil. I have a lot of dreams. One of them, is travelling to Japan. I hope that one day I will go to Japan. I would like to go to Australia too. I imagine that it is fantastic! Wow! Actually, I live in another city near to Rio de Janeiro. I love this city because there are many things to do there, like bars, parties, shoppings centers (Note 2), squares and cafeterias. I don´t known Rio de Janeiro very well. I just known some places there like Ipanema beach. When I go to a restaurant, I ask for the menu. My favorite food is a salad. I love carrots, tomatoes, potatoes, corn, lettuce and other legumes vegetables (Note 3). My favorite drink is a cup of orange juice. Sometimes I drink beer. Now I´m in my small city during quarentee quarantine. The people here are friendly, easygoing and sociable. There are six confirmed cases of Covid-19 here. I´m afraid! But I believe that the researchers will discovered a vaccine in the next near future. I have one sister named Adriana. She is a pretty woman! She doesn´t speak English. She just speaks Portuguese. She has a cute son. So, that is it for today! Thanks a lot for giving attention with to my writing!
Good job! I made some corrections and changed the order of the words in some places to make the text sound more natural to me. I also have a few notes to explain some of the corrections.
1) Your English will improve a lot when you learn when to use the infinitive form of the verb and when to use the gerund (the "ing" form). You can use "to practice" (as others have suggested) or "to train" in this sentence. The important thing is to use the infinitive form of the verb. The gerund (with "ing") is not generally used after the verb "need".
2) The word "shopping" in English is the gerund of the verb "to shop", it is not a place. I have been to several "Shoppings" in São Paulo. We call these places "Shopping Centers" or "Malls" in the USA.
3) The word legume exists in English but it refers to a very specific class of plants which includes peas (ervilhas). The more general term "vegetables" would include those foods that you listed. Notice that I changed the names of some of these vegetables to the plural form. These things are considered to be "countable"
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About me
I need to training practice my writing. So, I will to try writing about anything (like me, my family, my preferences). I was born in a small city here in Brazil. I have a lot of dreams. One of them, is travelling to Japan. I hope that one day I will go to Japan. I would like to go to Australia, too. I imagine that is would be fantastic! Wow! Actually, I live in another city near close to Rio de Janeiro. I love this city because there are many things to do there, like bars, parties, shoppings, squares and cafeterias. I don´t known very well Rio de Janeiro very well. I just known some places there like Ipanema beach. When I go to a restaurant, I ask for the menu. My favorite food is a salad. I love carrots, tomatoes, potatoes, corn, lettuce, and other legumes. My favorite drink is a cup of orange juice. Sometimes I drink beer. Now I´m in my small city during quarentee quarantine. The people here are friendly, easygoing, and sociable. There are six confirmed cases here of Covid-19. I´m afraid! But, I believe that the researchers discovered will discover a vaccine in the next future. I have one sister named Adriana. She is a pretty woman! She doesn´t speak English. She just speaks Portuguese. She has a cute son. So, that it is for today! Thanks a lot for attention with my writing giving my writing attention!
Good job!
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About me
I need to practice my writing. So, I will to try writing about anything (like me, my family and, my preferences). I was born in a small city here in Brazil. I have a lot of dreams. One of them, is travelling to Japan. I hope that one day I go to Japan. I would like to go to Australia too. I imagine that is fantastic! Wow! Actually, I live in another city near to Rio de Janeiro. I love this city because there are many things to do there, like bars, parties, shoppings, squares and cafeterias. I don´t known Rio de Janeiro very well . I just known some places there like Ipanema beach. When I go to a restaurant, I ask for the menu. My favorite food is a salad. I love carrot, tomato, potato, corn, lettuce and other legumes. My favorite drink is a cup of orange juice. Sometimes I drink beer. Now I´m in my small city during quarantine. The people here are friendly, easygoing and sociable. There are six confirmed cases here of Covid-19. I´m afraid! But I believe that the researchers will discovre a vaccine in the near future. I have one sister named Adriana. She is a pretty woman! She doesn´t speak English. She just speaks Portuguese. She has a cute son. So, that it is for today! Thanks a lot for helping with my writing!
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