if is not too much for ask TOEFL PRACTICE
Hello guys ^^ if is not too much for ask, can you please watch a youtube video (only the first 5 min) and tell me if I am doing good with my integrated essay. Pleeasee I beg you.
I really appreciate all the help that I could get from you ^^ Thanks a lot
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AY2ZUGBYhNQ
The main topic of the reading passage is about DTT, a chemical created during the world war II to kill unwanted insects. Mainly, mosquitos which carry diseases to people like malaria, and agricultural pests. But instead of do the function for what was created, the waste of the chemical which was poisonous went to the soil and water and this make harm to the birds and fishes. This poison and kill wildlife, for example this was the case of the bald eagle.
Also affects to human health, by consuming products that were sprayed with higher levels of DTT. This provokes the develop of some diseases like diabetes, cancer and birth defects.
For this reason, USA banned this product but suddenly when the product finally works correctly and was introduced to the market mosquitoes started developing a resistant to the chemical.
In the lecture, the professor agrees that small quantities of DTT did not harm animals and human. Instead did a lot of good by killing unwanted insects and inclusive preventing the spread of malaria and typhus that mosquitoes carried at that time.
In conclusion, the professor opinion is that DTT in small quantities does not harm any animals or humans.
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If is not too much for to ask for TOEFL PRACTICE
Hello guys,
If it is not too much for to ask, can you please watch a YouTube video (only the first 5 min) and tell me if I am doing good well with my integrated essay? Pleeasee I beg you.
I really appreciate all the help that I could can get from you. Thanks a lot!
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AY2ZUGBYhNQ
The main topic of the reading passage is about DTT, a chemical created during the World War II to kill agricultural pests and other unwanted insects, mainly mosquitos, which carry diseases to people like malaria. and agricultural pests. But Instead of doing the function for what which it was created, the waste of the chemical, which was poisonous, went into the soil and water. and This make harmed to the birds and fish. es. This poison and killed several wildlife, for example, this was the case of the bald eagle.
In the lecture, the professor agrees asserts that small quantities of DTT did not harm animals and humans. Instead, it did a lot of good including by killing unwanted insects and inclusive preventing the spread of malaria and typhus that by mosquitoes. carried at that time.
In conclusion, the professor's opinion is that DTT in small quantities does not harm any animals or humans.
"Good" is an adjective. You need an adverb to modify the verb "doing," so you should use "well."
"Agricultural pests" is not a disease, so I changed the order of the sentence to clarify that you were talking about two different types of insects, not two different diseases.
In general, you should not begin a sentence with "But," although you will occasionally see it in informal writing.
I changed the order of the 2nd sentence in paragraph 2 because "birth defects" is not a disease.
I changed "this reason" to "these reasons" because you listed several reasons, not just one.
I crossed out "finally worked correctly" because the US government didn't feel it worked correctly. That's why they banned it.
I changed "agrees" to "asserts" because there isn't agreement on the benefits of DDT. The USA banned it because they thought it was deadly. The professor disagrees, and states it isn't as bad as we have been led to believe.
If you have any questions about my corrections, please feel free to ask!
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if is not too much for ask TOEFL PRACTICE
Hello guys ^^ if is not too much for ask, can you please watch a youtube video (only the first 5 min) and tell me if I am doing good with my integrated essay. Pleeasee I beg you.
I really appreciate all the help that I could get from you ^^ Thanks a lot
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AY2ZUGBYhNQ
The main topic of the reading passage is about DTT, a chemical created during the world war II to kill unwanted insects. Mainly, mosquitos which carry diseases to people like malaria, and agricultural pests. But instead of doing the function for what it was created to do, the waste of the chemical which was poisonous went to the soil and water and this make harm harmed to the birds and fishes ("fish" is the commonly used plural form rather than "fishes"). This poisoned and killed wildlife, for example, this was which was the case of for the bald eagle.
Also, there were affects to human health, by consuming products that were sprayed with higher levels of DTT. This provokes the development of some diseases like diabetes, cancer and birth defects.
For this reason, the USA banned this product, but suddenly when the product finally works worked correctly and was introduced to the market mosquitoes started developing a resistance to the chemical.
In the lecture, the professor agrees that small quantities of DTT did not harm animals and humans. Instead it did a lot of good by killing unwanted insects, and inclusive including preventing the spread of malaria and typhus that mosquitoes carried at that time.
In conclusion, the professor opinion is that DTT in small quantities does not harm any animals or humans.
-Everything looks great! You understood the reading and lecture parts of the video and discussed them very well in your essay!
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