Women can do it !
She was working out at the park , after many parents talked to her about an emplyee to be a coach at high school before so many people had quit that job because of children . they were trouble-maker
.the first week was unbelievable !.However,on Saturday out of blue things went downhill, many children fought against other chidren who belonged to the Highschool it was so sad that she started to weep , so the principal talked to the coach and many things fell into place , an unemplyed woman was on the cards .HOwever , parents talked to the principal and he decided not to fired her .NOwadays , she works with children heavily.
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Women can do it!
This is hard for me to understand, so for this first part I just fixed the spelling and punctuation:
She was working out at the park, after many parents talked to her about an employee to be a coach at high school before so many people had quit that job because of children . they were trouble-maker
.the first week was unbelievable! However,on Saturday out of blue things went downhill, many children fought against other children who belonged to the High school it was so sad that she started to weep , so the principal talked to the coach and many things fell into place , an unemployed woman was on the cards .However , parents talked to the principal and he decided not to fired her. Nowadays, she works with children heavily.
This is my best guess as to what you where trying to say:
She was working out in the park, afterwards, many parents talked to her about becoming a coach at a high school. This was before so many people had quit that job because of the children. They were troublemakers. The first week was unbelievable! However, on Saturday, out of the blue, things went downhill. Many children from the high school, fought against each other. It was so saddening she started to weep, so the principle talked to the coach, and due to the circumstances it looked as if she might become unemployed. However, parents talked to the principle and he decided not to fire her. Nowadays, she works with children a lot.
Note:
I notice you use spaces before more punctuation marks (! , .) This isn't needed and can look really weird to a native English speaker. There should only ever be one space after the punctuation marks. Just so you know!
I hope some of this can help you!
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