May 9
Tomorrow I will go out for a dinner with my middle school classmate. Since last winter vacation, we haven’t sew long time, I miss her very much.
In WeChat, She said she wanted to eat barbecue with me. Almost at the same time, I told her I’d like to have Pizza Hut. Finally she indulged me.
I told her I was a fat girl now, and asked her shouldn’t laugh at me. But she thought it was a sign that I wound not greatly discerning and apprehending about the meaning of fat.
Thank her for her joke, I’m looking forward to tomorrow.
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May 9
Tomorrow I will go out for dinner with my middle school classmate. Since last winter vacation, we haven’t seen each other in a long time, and I miss her very much.
(不用一边写”Since last winter vacation"， 一边写"in a long time". 我觉得只写“We haven't seen each other since last winter vacation”就好了)
On WeChat, She said she wanted to eat barbecue with me. At almost the same time, I told her I’d like to have Pizza Hut. Eventually, she indulged me.
(“finally”不是个错误，但是我觉得有点不自然， 因为“finally”听起来你们花了很久时间吵架，或者你一点生气，一点无聊）
I told her I've become a fat girl now, and asked her not to laugh at me (“and that she shouldn't laugh at me" 也可以). But she thought it was a sign that I wasn't very discerning and apprehending about the meaning of "fat".
(这个句子很奇怪。。。 你想说的是不是”她以为这个事情表明你不把"胖"的意思当回事“？ 或许可以写 “a sign that I'm not taking the meaning of "fat" seriously enough" 或者 "a sign that I'm not as worried about "getting fat" as I should be")
(而且，有的英问语法书呆子会说《你不应该以”but"开头》，但是现代说英语的人都说这样！)
I appreciate her joke, and I’m looking forward to tomorrow.
Very well done! your grammar and spelling were mostly perfect, and I understood everything well except for the "fat" sentence. I hope my chinese corrections weren't too bad!
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May 9
Tomorrow I will go out for a dinner with my middle school classmate. Since last winter vacation, we haven’t sew long time seen each other (for a long time), I miss her very much.
In WeChat, Sshe said she wanted to eat barbecue with me. Almost at the same time, I told her I’d like to have Pizza Hut. Finally she indulged me.
I told her I was a fat girl now, and asked her shouldn’t not to laugh at me. But she thought it was a sign that I wound was not greatly discerning and nor apprehending comprehending about the meaning of fat.
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The sentence with "discerning and comprehending" is a little awkward.
You could use nouns instead of verbs ...
But she thought it was a sign that I had no discernment nor comprehension of the meaning of the word fat.
Hmmmh. Your original sentence is just as good. And it is very funny! :)
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