Essay #3 Kindly correct the grammar please.
*Practice writing for my exam: Letter to the press*
Dear Sir,
I read with interest your article on workers who are about to lose their jobs and I would like to express my views on the subject.
First of all, I find it extremely worrying as many families will lose their occupation. Not only will it have financially impact on them, but also emotionally. For instance, being unemployed will put you into thinking on how could you provide your family. Some of them, may not have enough savings so they have to find new job as soon as possible. Moreover, it will also affect the economy of our area. As great of people will be laid off soon, this could lead to a negative economic growth.
On the other hand, it is true that by using high-tech machinery, the work can be done more cheaply but it has also consequence for environment. It can raise the climate change that we are already facing now. Another interesting point is, working with people is more appealing than working with machine. Helping other people gives the feeling of satisfaction.
In conclusion, I believe such an important issue deserves more consideration as it involves not only every person who works there but the whole community as well.
Yours faithfully,
*insert name here*
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Essay #3 Kindly correct the grammar please.
*Practice writing for my exam: Letter to the press*
Dear Sir,
First of all, I find it extremely worrying as many families will lose their occupations. This not only will affect them financially, but also emotionally. For instance, being unemployed make you think about how you could provide your family more effectively. Some of them may not have enough savings, and therefore, they have to find new jobs as soon as possible. Moreover, it will also affect the economy of our area since several people will be laid off soon, and this could lead to negative economic growth.
On the other hand, it is true that by using high-tech machinery, the work could be done more cheaply but it has also consequences on the environment. It can raise the climate change that we are already facing. Another interesting point is, working with people is more appealing than working with a machine. Helping other people gives a feeling of satisfaction.
In conclusion, I believe such an important issue deserves more consideration as it involves not only every person who works there but the whole community as well.
Yours faithfully,
*insert name here*
NB) what do you mean by raising climate change? the temperatures could be raised but not climate change!
change the sentence.
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Essay #3 Kindly correct the grammar please.
*Practice writing for my exam: Letter to the press*
Dear Sir,
I read with interest your article on workers who are about to lose their jobs and I would like to express my views on the subject.
First of all, I find it extremely worrying as many families will lose their occupation. Not only will it have financially impact on them, but also emotionally. For instance, being unemployed will make you think about put you into thinking on how could you provide your family. Some of them, may not have enough savings so they would have to find new job as soon as possible. Moreover, it will also affect the economy of our area. As great numbers of people will be laid off soon, this could lead to a negative economic growth.
On the other hand, it is true that by using high-tech machinery, the work can be done more cheaply. Nevertheless, but it has also consequences for the environment. It can raise the climate change that we are already facing now. Another interesting point is that working with people is more appealing than working with machines. Helping other people and having colleagues gives the a feeling of satisfaction.
In conclusion, I believe such an important issue deserves more consideration as it involves not only every person who works there but the whole community as well.
Yours faithfully,
*insert name here*
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