The 9th day
Alcohol made me happy, and then I was about to go to bed without writing diary.
How weak my will is...
Tonight, there was an earthquake of M5.5 in Chiba prefecture around 9 PM.
People who live in the other countries feel that the earthquake of M5.5 is terrible disaster,
but we Japanese have gotten used to earthquakes.
M5.5 is not big one, and I live in Kanagawa prefecture.
When the shaking reached our town, it became much smaller.
What surprised me was the warning sound of my iPhone.
Loud warning sound rang when I drank beer.
My heart jumped by the exaggerated alert.
Anyway, it was nice to avoid big disaster.
If a huge earthquake devastated around Tokyo,
it would be like a hell under this harsh circumstances.
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The 9th day
Alcohol made me happy, and then I was about to go to bed without writing in my diary. How weak my will is...
Tonight, there was an earthquake of M5.5 in Chiba prefecture around 9 PM. People who live in the other countries feel that the M5.5 earthquakes are a of M5.5 is terrible disaster, but we Japanese in Japan, we have gotten used to earthquakes. M5.5 is not a big one, and I live in Kanagawa prefecture. When the shaking reached our town, it became much smaller weaker. (You don't have to, but you can also say, "By the time the shaking reached our town, it became much weaker." Both are ok! "By the time" feels a little bit more natural in this case.)
What surprised me was the warning sound of my iPhone. The loud warning sound rang when I drank beer. My heart jumped by at the exaggerated alert. (You can say, "I was surprised BY the alert," or "My heart jumped AT the sound of the alert." Usually, when the verb form is "I was ___ed," we use "by." For example, "I was moved by your words." "I was surprised by ___." "I was pleased by your apology." When the verb form is just regular ___ed past tense, we usually use "at." "I jumped at the sound." "I clapped at the end of the performance." Of course, sometimes there are special cases, but this is often true!)
Anyway, it was nice to avoid a big disaster. If a huge earthquake devastated the area around Tokyo, it would be like a hell under this these harsh circumstances.
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Many Japanese people say "we Japanese," and it makes sense, but it doesn't feel very natural. I think it is better to say "in Japan, we..." However, "we Japanese" is not wrong! The same is true about "earthquake of M5.5." It's not wrong, but it's also more natural to say "M5.5 earthquake." Also, if you want to, it feels more natural to put your sentences together in a paragraph instead of a list, but it is not necessary. Anyway, your English is great! Most of the things that I changed in your writing are just to make it feel more natural. Your way was not wrong, for most of them. If you came to America and said your original version, everyone would understand you clearly!
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The 9th day
Alcohol made me happy, and then I was about to go to bed without writing in my diary.
How weak my will is...
Tonight, there was an earthquake of M5.5 in Chiba prefecture around 9 PM.
People who live in the other countries feel that the earthquake of M5.5 is terrible disaster,
but we Japanese have gotten used to earthquakes.
M5.5 is not a big one, and I live in Kanagawa prefecture.
When the shaking reached our town, it became much smaller.
What surprised me was the warning sound of my iPhone.
A loud warning sound rang when I drank was drinking beer.
My heart jumped by at the exaggerated alert.
Anyway, it was nice to avoid a big disaster.
If a huge earthquake devastated around Tokyo,
it would be like a Hell under these harsh circumstances.
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Hi JayJu san,
Thanks for your comment,
and I'll go and write something in Japanese on your notebook!
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Wow, your english is amazing! I hope you keep writing here!
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Hi Pseudonymous san,
Thanks for writting comment.
I found you are learning Japanese.
I'll go to your notebook, and write something.
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