Confinement Journal. One
Time goes by. My little cat is a big cat now. I'm a little older The world is confused and most people are worried, but she (my cat) remains indifferent. Eat, drink, sleep and play. At some point she plays with our dog, but tries to anger her. A cat is a cat and a dog is a dog, too different. My cat generally ignores me ... except if I'm working on some of my calligraphy, then she comes and sets foot on the paper, or plays with the brushes, or touches everything on the table. Then I get mad and invite her out, and she looks at me calmly and walks out with dignity.
Then I spend my confinement: with my family, the cat, the dog, my books, my guitar, my calligraphy. If I look from the terrace, in the distance, very far, I see the Mediterranean Sea. This afternoon it is raining. I would like to know how long we will be locked up.
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Confinement Journal. One
Time goes by; my little cat is a big cat now. I've grown a little older. The world is confused and most people are worried, but she (my cat) remains indifferent. Eat, drink, sleep and play. At some point she plays with our dog, but it tries to anger her. A cat is a cat and a dog is a dog, so they're too different. My cat generally ignores me ... except if I'm working on some of my calligraphy, then she comes and sets foot on the paper, or plays with the brushes, or touches everything on the table. Then I get mad and invite her out, and she looks at me calmly and walks out with dignity.
After that I spend my time in confinement with my family and pets, reading books, playing guitar, or practicing my calligraphy. If I look from the terrace, very far in the distance, I can see the Mediterranean Sea. This afternoon it's raining. I would like to know how long we will be locked up.
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First, I'd like to say that I enjoyed reading your composition. You have effectively conveyed a particular mood of this time when, for many of us, the world has mostly shrunk to just the inside of our house. And yet, there are simple pleasures to be enjoyed and the mischievous antics of a cat to smile about.
I have just two suggestions of changes to make to the English:
"invite her out" usually would be said if you were inviting someone to go somewhere like a restaurant or a theater. It is often used when talking about a romantic date, but can be also be used to talk about asking friends or family to join you in going someplace enjoyable.
For your cat, "I get mad and invite her to go outside" or "I get mad and ask her to go outside" or "I get mad and tell her to go outside" would all be fine ways to write this.
Here are some ways that I might write this other sentence:
If I look from the terrace, in the distance, very far away, I see the Mediterranean Sea.
If I look from the terrace, I see the Mediterranean Sea very far away in the distance.
If I look from the terrace, I see the Mediterranean Sea very far off in the distance.
If I look from the terrace, very far away in the distance, I see the Mediterranean Sea.
If I look from the terrace, very far off in the distance, I see the Mediterranean Sea.
I like the way you ended your composition, too. We can glimpse the bigger world...and we wait hopefully for the day to come soon when we can freely return to it.
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Sure. Thanks.
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The world is confused, your cat is not.
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