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Please correct mistakes))) In a modern society, more and more young people want to live in the city to achieve success. Although there are people who are convinced that urban life can cause huge harm to health so they move to the countryside. First of all, the city gives a lot of modern amenities, there are better medical services and infrastructure various places for entertainment .Moreover, there is more opportunity for self-realization,promotion, search for a job in a specialty, get an education.Despite the fact that urban life pollutes the environment, people are trying to improve the situation and to be closer to the nature for this purpose they create park zones.However, due to the large population , the city has a high crime rate, which is largely due to the fact that many people earn money in a non-legal way, and more people suffer from various mental illnesses . Another disadvantage is that people have to spend a lot of time on the road because of traffic jams and intens traffic . On the other hand, some people prefer to live far from the city noise and rush, busy . The environmental situation in the village is much better than in the city because there are fewer buildings and transport, which are a global problem for the environment.In addition, people can enjoy the beauty of nature every day because they do not have to go far to do this. Furthermore the village people have fewer health problems because they breathe fresh and clean air and eat natural food.However life in countryside, the same things can happen every day so a person can get tired of such a slow, calm and quiet life. Thus, it is impossible to determine exactly where it is better to live . I believe that the ideal place to live depends on the personal preferences and character of each person.

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In a modern society, more and more young people want to live in the city to achieve success. Although However, there are people who are convinced that urban life can cause huge harm to health, (two independent clauses so need a comma) so they move to the countryside.

First of all, the city gives has a lot of modern amenities., there There are better medical services, infrastructure, and and infrastructure various places for entertainment. Moreover, there is more opportunity for self-realization,promotion, searching for a job in a specialty, and getting an education.Despite the fact that urban life pollutes the environment, people are trying to improve the situation and creating park zones to be closer to nature. ("trying" and "creating" both end in -ing so should be used together) to be closer to the nature for this purpose they create park zones.However, due to the large population, the city has a high crime rate, which is largely due to the fact that many people earn money in a non-legal illegal ways, and more people suffer from various mental illnesses. (The last sentence is grammatically correct, but can be split into smaller sentences. "However, due to the large population, the city has a high crime rate. This is largely due to the fact that many people earn money in illegal ways and suffer from various mental illnesses.") Another disadvantage is that people have to spend a lot of time on the road because of traffic jams and intense traffic (you can say "traffic jams and intense traffic" as just "intense traffic").

On the other hand, some people prefer to live far from the city noise and rush, busy the busy rush. The environmental situation in the village is much better than in the city because there are fewer buildings and less transport, which are a global problems (because you are talking about buildings and transport, so use plural) for the environment.In addition, people can enjoy the beauty of nature every day because they do not have to go far to do this. Furthermore, the village people have fewer health problems because they breathe fresh and clean air and eat natural food.However, for life in the countryside, the same things can happen every day so a person can get tired of such a slow, calm, and quiet life.

Thus, it is impossible to determine exactly where it is better to live . I believe that the ideal place to live depends on the personal preferences and character of each person.

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