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money and grade To encourage children working hard at school, people have different methods. Some parents offer their children money for each high grade they get in school. From my perspective, even though according to it, children are likely to make much more effort, it still not a perfect way to do. To begin with, in my view, I don't think it is a good education for children to tell them everything can be bought by money. Many things, such as people's emotion or effort, which cannot be evaluated by money. For instance, there are a lot of scientists who advocate their whole life to research, they try their best to study something for belief and enthusiasm rather than money. In fact, I remember many scientists gain reward and money from the government because of their achievements, however, most of them spend that money on research again or donate it for people who need money. I believe this is the spirit that parents should teach their children from school-age. Furthermore, it cannot be denied that in the short term, money maybe can encourage children to get a good grade. What about a long time? If one day, children cannot receive money from their parents, would they still want to study? I'm afraid they would unsatisfied with their parents. As a result, they refuse to study unless they get money again. In this case, money becomes a damaging thing for children. Besides, the children who grew up under such a situation would take for granted that whatever they do, they must be paid. When they confront the fail one day, would they accept it? Would they get money even they enter a university? These are all unsolved problems. That's why I can't say it is a reasonable choice. In conclusion, I agree that money can be used to encourage children to do better as a reward, but should not let children take it as a purpose. What parents should do, is making their children form the correct attitude to money, study, value and their relationships. That is the most important thing for their future.

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money and grade

To encourage children to work hard at school, people have different methods. Some parents offer their children money for each high grade they get in school. From my perspective, even though according to that way of thinking, children are likely to make much more effort, it us still not a perfect way to do.

To begin with, in my view, I don't think it is good to teach children that everything can be bought with money. Many things, such as people's emotion or effort, cannot be bought. For instance, there are a lot of scientists who spend their whole lives doing research. They try their best to study something out of belief and enthusiasm for the subject, rather than for money. In fact, I know many scientists have gained financial incentives from the government because of their achievements. However, most of them spend that money on research, or donate it to people who need money. I believe this is the spirit in which parents should teach their children from school age.

Furthermore, it cannot be denied that in the short term, maybe money can encourage children to get a good grade. Thought what about in the long term? If, one day, children don't receive money from their parents, would they still want to study? I'm afraid they would be unsatisfied with their parents. As a result, they would refuse to study unless they get money again. In this case, money becomes a damaging thing for children. Besides, children who grow up under such a situation would take for granted that whatever they do, they must be paid. When they confront failure one day, will they accept it? Will they get a financial incentive when they enter studies at university? These are all unsolved problems. That's why I can't say it is a reasonable choice.

In conclusion, I agree that money can be used to encourage children to do better as a reward, but it should not be the only incentive. What parents should do is to teach their children a healthy attitude towards money, study, value and their relationships. That is the most important thing for their future.
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money and grades

To encourage children working to work hard at school, people have different methods. Some parents offer their children money for each high grade they get in school. From my perspective, even though according to it, in this waychildren are likely to make much more effort, it still not a perfect way to do so.

To begin with, in my view, I don't think it is a good education for children to tell them everything can be bought by money. Many things, such as people's emotion or effort, which cannot be evaluated by money. For instance, there are a lot of scientists who advocate dedicate their whole life to research, they try their best to study something for belief and enthusiasm rather than money. In fact, I remember many scientists have gaiedn reward and money from the government because of their achievements, however, most of them spend that money on research again or donate it for to people who need money. I believe this is the spirit that parents should teach their children from school-age.

Furthermore, it cannot be denied that in the short term, money maybe can encourage children to get a good grade. What about a long time in the long term? If one day, the children cannot receive money from their parents, would they still want to study? I'm afraid they would be unsatisfied with their parents. As a result, they refuse to study unless they get money again. In this case, money becomes a damaging thing for children. Besides, the children who grew up under such a situation would take for granted that whatever they do, they must be paid. When they confront the fail failure one day, would they accept it? Would they get money even though they enter a university? These are all unsolved problems. That's why I can't say it is a reasonable choice.

In conclusion, I agree that money can be used to encourage children to do better as a reward, but that should not let children take it as a purpose. What parents should do, is making make their children form the correct attitude to money, study, value and their relationships. That is the most important thing for their future.


Good use of connecting expressions, well organised and corrected. Opinions clearly and well expressed.

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