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If we read old travel stories about Bogotá, We would see the fascination that was produced by Traditional markets. As Issac Holton told us, in his book new grenade New Granada: Twenty months in the Andes published in 1857, It was possible to see the flux of people from the countryside going downtown and “the streets became a river in which honey, panela[tipical food from colombia], sugar, fruits and one thousend things flow”. In 1882, Rosa Carnegie William(1990) also find surprised by the way in which indiguenous people, without shoes and carrying their babies in the back, brought food to Bogota.
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If we read old travel stories about Bogotá, we would see the fascination (that was)* produced by traditional markets. As Issac Holton told uswrote in his book new grenade New Granada: Twenty months in the Andes published in 1857, it was possible to see the flux of people from the countryside going downtown* and “the streets became a river in which honey, panela[typical food from colombia], sugar, fruits and one thousand things flow”. In 1882, Rosa Carnegie William (1990) also find surprisedwas also surprised by the way in which indigenous people, without shoes and carrying their babies on their backs, brought food to Bogota.
*Highlighted because the sentence is probably more common without "that was" but it is also correct with it.
*While not incorrect, I feel like this word is more associated with modern urban areas. For a book from 1857, it might be more common to say "going into towns" or "going into villages" depending on whether the place was a town or village.
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If we read old travel stories about Bogotá,
we would can see the fascination that was produced generated by/inspired by traditional markets.
or, better would be:
we can see that traditional markets were a source of fascination.
As Issac Holton wrote told us, in his book New Granada: Twenty Months in the Andes, published in 1857, it was possible to see the influx of people from the countryside coming into town going downtown, and “the streets became a river in which honey, panela [a typical food from Colombia], sugar, fruits, and one thousand things flow.” In 1882, Rosa Carnegie-Williams (1990) was also find surprised by the way in which indigenous people, without shoes and carrying their babies in on their backs, brought food to Bogota.
Maybe it's easier to read without the additions and deletions:
As Issac Holton wrote in his book New Granada: Twenty Months in the Andes, published in 1857, it was possible to see the influx of people from the countryside coming into town, and “the streets became a river in which honey, panela [a typical food from Colombia], sugar, fruit, and one thousand things flow.” In 1882, Rosa Carnegie-Williams was also surprised by the way in which indigenous people, without shoes and carrying their babies on their backs, brought food to Bogota.
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If we read old travel stories about Bogotá, we would see the fascination that was produced by traditional markets. As Issac Holton told us, in his book new grenade New Granada: Twenty Months in the Andes published in 1857, it was possible to see the flux of people from the countryside going downtown and “the streets became a river in which honey, panela [typical food from Colombia], sugar, fruits and one thousand things flow”. In 1882, Rosa Carnegie William (1990) also was surprised by the way in which indiguenous people, without shoes and carrying their babies in the back, brought food to Bogota.
Very interesting! I should study a bit more about Bogotá. I made a few small corrections, but this was a very good paragraph!
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