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Reading and Writing Writing and reading are vital necessities rather than simple hobbies; they need a special care and time, and they give you an opportunity to improve yourself by them. Not just improve yourself, also to be relaxed, to think clearer.. Benefits of them can be diversified, but they have special meanings for everyone, everyone has a different approach at them and they have different interests... While calling them as vital necessities, it's also something relative, but I think it's not like that for bookworms or writers. Because I don't think they will reject that idea completely, because reading and writing have an important place in their lives too. Even though if writing is a way of to be relaxed, why we can't be clear while writing, or why we have a starting problem before a text? As I know it's a common problem that we spend time before starting, as if we face with a hard question in an exam that we don't know it's answer. Do we tighten ourselves, in order to choose best words? Or do we escape from ourselves? Maybe, but the certain thing is, words are escaping from us at that time... Stability is also important for them, if you keep reading books for a long time, you will get used to read and comprehend faster, and it'll also reflect to your way of thinking too, killing two birds with one stone. About writing, you'll improve new writing styles by writing continuously, and be able to fix your mistakes too, and you can also learn new words and use them in order to learn. This time you kill three birds... Briefly, reading and writing are among most lucrative occupations that have plenty of benefits and our supporter for expanding our horizons.

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Reading and Writing

Reading and writing are not just simple hobbies, but rather are vital necessities that need special care and lots of time. They provide opportunities for you not just to improve yourself, but also to relax or to think more clearly. Reading and writing provide diverse benefits, depending on your interests. Everyone has a different approach, but reading and writing can hold special meaning for everyone. That being said, if you don't consider yourself a bookworm or a writer, your mileage may vary on whether they're vital necessities.

You might ask, if writing is supposed to help me relax, then why can't I write clearly or why do I have trouble even just starting to write? This is a pretty common problem, like facing a difficult question in an exam that we don't know how to answer. Do we tighten ourselves, in order to choose the best words? Or do we escape from ourselves? What's certain is that words are trying to escape from us. [Note: I'm not sure what you mean to say by these two sentences. Is this an idiom of some sort?]

Consistency is also important in reading and writing. [Note: The correct word for what you mean to say is consistency, not stability]. If you keep reading books, then your reading speed will increase and your comprehension skills will improve. Your ways of thinking will expand as well, killing two birds with one stone. Meanwhile, writing continuously will allow you to improve your writing style as well as help you fix your mistakes. You can also put new words you've learned into practice - killing not just two but three birds with one stone.

In sum, reading and writing are lucrative activities [note: not occupations, which is a word usually used to describe careers or jobs, and this essay is not discussing reading and writing in the context of employment] with plenty of benefits, especially for expanding your horizons.
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Reading and Writing

Writing and reading are vital necessities rather than simple hobbies; they need a special care and time, and they give you an opportunity to improve yourself through them. Reading and writing can also help you to relax and think clearly. The benefits of them can be diverse, but they have special meanings for everyone. Everyone has a different approach at them and they have different interests.
While they are necessities, their benefits can be relative. I think it's not like that for bookworms or writers, but I don't think they will reject that idea completely, because reading and writing have an important place in their lives too.

Even though if writing can be a way of to relax, why do we sometimes have trouble starting a text, or writing our thoughts clearly. As I know, it's a common problem that we spend time before starting, as if we are faced with a hard question in an exam and we don't know it's answer. Do we tighten ourselves, in order to choose the best words? Or do we escape from ourselves? Either way, words can escape us.

Stability is also important for them; if you keep reading books for a long time, you will get used to reading and your comprehension will improve. It will also reflect to your way of thinking too, killing two birds with one stone. As for writing, you'll improve your style by writing continuously, and be able to fix your mistakes. You may even learn to use new words to express yourself with. Now you're killing three birds.
Briefly, reading and writing are among the most lucrative occupations, and their many benefits work to broaden our horizons.

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Good job Yusuf! You have a good grasp of how to express yourself creatively in English, so most of my corrections are for natural phrasing or word choice. I tried not to change your sentence structure where I could so that my corrections would be easier to work with. My biggest suggestion now is to be careful about the length of your sentences; you can make complex sentences with punctuation ( , : ;) and conjunctions (and, but, or, however), but it's easy to add too many phrases. When we learn how to write in school our teachers would call those "run-on sentences", because they run on and on and on and on and on.... and you see what I mean. You may also be interested to know that we have a phrase for how difficult it can be to start writing, or painting, or any other new project. When we look at a blank page and don't know how to begin, we call it "the power of the white".

If you have any questions about anything, please feel free to ask!

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