Let me know what part is wrong please
After a long time, I had a good time with my friend. We ate 'Topokki' for lunch and played LOL like always in the PC room we went to every time. It was a short but pleasant time. On my way home I felt a little empty. It’s what I always feel when it’s time to part with friends. I’m used to it, but I don’t like it that much. When I was younger, I didn’t want to part with my friends, so I used to play all night. but the longer I have fun, the bigger the emptiness. If I live abroad later, Can I meet my friends, have a good time and feel as empty as I am today on my way home? I really want to feel that.
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Let me know what part is wrong please
After a long time, I had a good time with my friend. We ate 'Topokki' for lunch and played LOL like always in the PC room that we went to every time. It was a short but pleasant time. On my way home, I felt a little empty. It’s what I always feel when it’s time to part with friends. I’m used to it, but I don’t like it that much. When I was younger, I didn’t want to leave my friends, so I used to play all night. But the longer I had fun, the bigger the emptiness. If I live abroad later, can I meet my friends, have a good time and feel as empty as I am today on my way home? I really want to feel that.
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Let me know what part is wrong please
After a long time apart, I had fun with my friend. We ate Tteokbokki for lunch and played LOL in the PC room we always used to go to. It was a short but lovely/fun/enjoyable time. On my way home I felt a little empty. It’s what I always feel when it’s time to part with friends. I’m used to it, but I don’t like it that much. When I was younger, I didn’t want to leave my friends, so I used to play all night. But the longer I have fun, the bigger the emptiness. If I live abroad in the future, will I meet my friends, have a good time and then feel as empty as I am today on my way home? I really want to feel that.
Fantastic job! The corrections I've given are just to make it sound more natural, it was mostly completely correct!
"Tteokbokki" is how 떡볶이 is usually romanised (made into Latin alphabet) which is why I changed it, but what you wrote was still understandable!
'Pleasant' has sort of formal connotations, which sounds a bit strange for talking about a day with a friend which is why I've offered some ideas for replacement words above.
If you have any questions about any changes I made, please do ask me! 잘 했습니다!
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