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TzuHsuan Lin
Hi! I’d like to talk about my day~ Please correct it if anything doesn’t sound ok. This morning I studied history for GSAT that I’m going to take in three days. GSAT is like SAT for the US or A-level for the UK, but in Taiwan we can only take it once. My classmates are nervous, some of my friends are freaking out, high school seniors as we are have to take this life-influencing exam so serious that I’m worried about some pals who have started to feel uncomfortable and to have symptoms like stomach ache and so on. 　　I just had dinner with my family. My cousin who is currently working in Hong Kong came back and I haven’t seen him for about three months! His visit occurred to me that I’m going to leave home to college this fall. Preparing for my college is really excited, but I know I’m gonna miss my home, my family and this gorgeous island Taiwan so bad. 　　Thank you for taking time reading my essay:)

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Hi!, I’d like to talk about my day ~ . Please correct it if anything doesn’t sound ok (... doesn't sound right).

This morning I studied history for my GSAT that I’m going to take in three days. GSAT is like SAT for the US or A-level for the UK, but in Taiwan we can only take it once. My classmates are nervous, some of my friends are freaking out, high school seniors as we are like myself have to take this life-influencing life-changing exam so seriously that I’m worried about some pals (pals is informal, better to use friends) who have started to feel uncomfortable and to have anxious and have started showing symptoms like stomach ache and so on.
I just had dinner with my family. My cousin who is currently working in Hong Kong came back, and I haven’t seen him for about three months! . His visit occurred to reminded me that I’m going to leave home to for college this fall. Preparing for my college is really excited I'm really excited about preparing for college, but I know I’m really gonna (slang) going to miss my home, my family and this gorgeous island Taiwan so bad.

Thank you for taking time reading my essay:)
Thank you for sharing. :)

Note :
  • You often use informal words and slang like wanna, gonna, gotta etc. I suggest trying not to use them when you are trying to improve your English otherwise it becomes a habit and you can't tell slang from formal English.
  • "Life-Influencing" is not so common. More common to say "life-changing" or "life-threatening."

Good luck for your GSAT. 加油 ！ :) .

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