Han’s swimming inner mind.
I was in a local swimming team around 12 years old. Each day, I had to go to the pool twice a week, with one kilometers each respectively. It was a nightmare to me to follow the routine training, so swim to me turned into a pretty confused sport in my childhood, which I’m good at but afraid doing. After a decade, I hanged out with my friend to the pool with the faith to swim that fast just like before, however, the reality gives me a straight punch. After the following years laziness, I can only swim for 150 meters once. To enhance my body strength for surfing and also to my health, I wrote this essay for checking my improvement, wish I could catch up my younger record and even get further.
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When I was around twelve years old, I was a member of a local swimming team. Back then, all of us had to go to the pool twice a week, where we then all swam one kilometer each, respectively. It was an absolute nightmare for me to follow the routine training, so understandably, swimming turned out to be a “love-hate” relationship, if not a somewhat confusing participation sport, for me in my childhood. In other words, it was something I was good at, but also something I did not truthfully want to do. Recently, after a decade had passed, I went with my friend to the pool along with a complete faith that I could swim as fast and as far as I did before, however, reality definitely gave me a sucker punch. My laziness, my lack of training, and the resulting lack of fitness over the following years since that time, combined to leave me weak, breathless, and only able to swim 150 meters--in total! Of course, I was somewhat embarrassed about, as well as disappointed with, my current ability and performance. As a result, I wrote this essay to serve as a reminder of, and as a motivation for, the need to improve my physical conditioning not only to enhance my body strength for surfing, but also to improve my overall everyday health. Someday soon, I hope that I could match my swimming abilities from when I was younger, and maybe, even surpass it. Even better, now that I understand the benefits of it, as well as how it fits into my life goals, perhaps this time, swimming will not seem to be such a torture!*
Hi, Han. Good job! Whatever changes I made were to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, to clarify your thoughts, and for ease of reading. My sincerest apologies if I have misinterpreted. I hope that this helps you, Jonathan.
*Oh! The loneliness of long-distance swimming. I remember it all too well! Many people think hearing “I don’t love you anymore…” is the worse phrase that they can hear, but for me, I think it is “Into the water!” (*-^)
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