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Dear Alex,
I hope you’re well. I’m writing to tell you that I took part in a lottery and I got the main prize – two tickets to a concert – which I desire to share with you.
This event will take place in a few months – at the 5th of March to be exact. The concert will be held in the Concert Hall here, in Moscow. There will be plenty of famous singers (Sia, Madonna and Lady Gaga among them) and this event will last about 5 hours.
I’m really happy that I won tickets for the show. And it was so easy! I just bought a couple of lottery tickets in the shop near my house several weeks ago. I didn’t hope to win because I’d never won a thing, you know. However when I opened the site of lottery in the web I realized that the wining number was written right on the one of my tickets!
When I got my tickets to the concert I had no hesitations about who I’d go with. I want to visit this event with you because I know that you’re fond of pop-singers. Also it was very funny to go to the previous concert with you.
Keep in touch,
Mariya.
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Are there any mistakes?
Dear Alex,
I hope you’re well. I’m writing to tell you that I took part in a lottery and I got the main prize – two tickets to a concert – which I desire would like to to share with you.
This event will take place in a few months – at the 5th of March to be exact. The concert will be held in the Concert Hall here, in Moscow. There will be plenty of famous singers (Sia, Madonna and Lady Gaga among them) and this event will last about 5 hours.
I’m really happy that I won tickets for the show. And it was so easy! I just bought a couple of lottery tickets in the shop near my house several weeks ago. I didn’t hope to think I would win because I'd I've never won a thing, you know. However, when I opened the site of lottery in the web lottery website I realized that the winning number was written right on the one of my tickets!
When I got my tickets to the concert I had no hesitations about who I’d go with. I want to visit go to this event with you because I know that you’re fond of pop-singers. Also it was very funny to go to the previous concert with you.
Keep in touch,
Mariya.
"I desire to share with you" is technically correct, but you won't see any native English speakers saying it - we would say "I would like to share with you" instead.
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Are there any mistakes?
Dear Alex,
I hope you’re well. I’m writing to tell you that I took part in a lottery and I won the grand prize! – two tickets to a concert – which I would like to share with you.
This event will take place in a few months – at the 5th of March to be exact. The concert will be held in the Concert Hall here, in Moscow. There will be a lot of famous singers (Sia, Madonna and Lady Gaga among them) and this event will last about 5 hours.
I’m really happy that I won tickets for the show. And it was so easy! I just bought a couple of lottery tickets in the shop near my house several weeks ago. I didn’t hope to win because I have never won any thing before, you know. However, when I saw the winning number on the web site, I realized that the wining number was written right on one of my tickets!
When I got my tickets to the concert I had no hesitations about who I’d go with. I want to visit this event with you because I know that you’re fond of pop-singers. Also it was very funny to go to the previous concert with you.
Please let me know soon if you can come so we can start planning!
Keep in touch,
Mariya.
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