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This is a really story. Since I heard of what he said, I really feel like writing something for him. He is having the hope to his future, which is unbelievable since that positive sense would appear on that person's face. He was a criminal, and was served 21 years since he was 15.
So, you guys may be confused about why the guy like this could got positive about his future? The reason is he got in a place called the Full Circle Auto Repair and Training Center, where the people working there almost are individuals who were previously incarcerated. The aim of this program is just one: really transform pre-criminals into residents, give them a chance to get into society.
The program train them to be auto mechanics, certificate them and then find them jobs in the community and dealerships and in local garages, help them build a career. Moreover, the program really pay them by the times they work, as ordinary workers.
The reason why the program began is in America, over two million people currently incarcerated and more than 600,000 are released from prison every year. Close to seventy five percent of them would get back in prison within five to eight years, because they are gonna be sent to the neighborhood where they committed a crime, plus this, they always will be difficult getting a job because they were criminals, let alone they have not skills to make a living. This program really helped, and is helping many confused soul.
I think of it as a really meaningful thing, if I had the chance, I would definitely to try to give a hand to them. what do you think about it?
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Note: yellow are words I added, purple is a tip or different way that is also ok. I also want to disclaim, I am not a English teacher, so I'm not sure if my corrections are acceptable. I did my best to make this notebook entry more natural and slightly formal. If there are any mistakes I made, please do correct them. :)
This is a really real story. Since After I heard of what he said his story (It's better if you introduce who you are talking about or how he is related to you. For example, "after I heard my friend John's story), I really feel felt like writing something for him. He is having the a hope to for his future, which is unbelievable since that positive sense would appear on that person's face (I'm sorry, I couldn't fully understand what you meant). He was a criminal and was served 21 years in prison since he was 15.
So, you guys may be confused about why the a guy like this could got be positive about his future? The reason is, he got in a place called The Full Circle Auto Repair and Training Center, where almost all the people working there almost are are individuals who were have been previously incarcerated. The aim of this program is just one: to really transform pre-criminals into residents, give them a chance to get into society.
The program trains them to be auto mechanics, certificates them, and then find them jobs in the community, dealerships and in local garages to help them build a career. Moreover, the program really pays them by the times hours they work; as ordinary workers.
The reason why the program began begin is because in America, over two million people are currently incarcerated and more than 600,000 are released from prison every year. Close to seventy-five percent of them would get back in prison within five to eight years because they many are gonna be sent back to the neighborhood where they committed a crime. plus this, Also, they always will always be have difficulty getting a job because they were criminals before, let alone they did not have the skills to make a living. This program really has helped and is continuing to helping help many confused souls.
I think( or "believe") of it as this program is doing a really meaningful thing and if I had the chance, I would definitely want to try to give a hand to them them a hand. What do you think about it?
This is a real story. After I heard my friend's story, I felt like writing something for him. He is having hope for his future, which is unbelievable because he was a criminal and served 21 years in prison since he was 15.
So, you guys may be confused about why a guy like this could be positive about his future? The reason is, he got in a place called The Full Circle Auto Repair and Training Center, where almost all the people working there have been previously incarcerated. The aim of this program is just one: to transform pre-criminals into residents, give them a chance to get into society.
The program trains them to be auto mechanics, certificates them, and then find them jobs in the community, dealerships, and local garages to help them build a career. Moreover, the program pays them by the hours they work; as ordinary workers.
The reason why the program begin is because in America, over two million people are currently incarcerated and more than 600,000 are released from prison every year. Close to seventy-five percent would get back in prison within five to eight years because many are sent back to the neighborhood where they committed a crime. Also, they will always have difficulty getting a job because they were criminals before, let alone they did not have the skills to make a living. This program has helped and is continuing to help many confused souls.
I think this program is doing a really meaningful thing, and if I had the chance, I would want to try to give them a hand. What do you think?
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朋友你先搞懂谓语成分和定语成分…你写的这些句子大部分都搞混了
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