Dec 2 I’m writing sentences every day for writing practice. But I’m worried about that I don’t have story to write because I repeat the same life. The sentences are getting shorter and be felt simple.

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Dec 2 I’m writing sentences every day for writing practice. But I’m worried about that I don’t have story to write because I repeat the same life. The sentences are getting shorter and be felt simple. Anyway, to write down today’s routine, I got up early and then I went to the school. I did my best listen to classes. I thought that I don’t know a lot of vocabulary during listenning to class. From now on, I have to study vocabulary too. I had a lunch with my friend and then I came back home. There is always home mom at home. Now, I live away from my family but, I don’t feel alone. Because there is my home mom here. I always thanks for my home mom. I’ll take a rest a little time and then I’m going to go to the gym. After work out, I’m going to review what I learned today.

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Diary Entry for December 2, 2019

I am writing sentences almost every day to practice my writing, but I am worried that I do not have much to write about because I live the same life day after day. Even I have noticed that my sentences are getting shorter, and I feel that they are much too simplistic. Anyway, this was today’s routine.

I work up early, as usual, and then went off to school. I tried my best to listen during my classes, but I thought that I simply did not recognize many of the words while listening to my teacher speak. From now on, I guess that I have to study some more vocabulary too! I then had lunch with my friend, before coming back to the place that I stay, where the property owner, whom I call my “home mom,” is always around. Presently, as you may have guessed, I live apart from my family, but I do not feel alone because I have my “home mom” taking care of and looking after me here. I always thankful for my home mom! Right now, I will rest a little bit, and then I am going to go to the gym and work out. After I return home, I am going to review what I learned today.*

Hi, Kimi. Good job! Whatever changes I made were to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, to complete your thoughts, and for ease of reading. My sincerest apologies if I have misinterpreted. I hope that this helps you. Jonathan.

*I wrote all your abbreviations out to give it a more formal tone (if you are going to abbreviate "December," you need to use a period after it, as in "Dec."). As you are still in school, perhaps you should do this as well, and leave the use of abbreviations to your personal chats with friends. Yes, learn them, but do not use them for your schoolwork or other more formal, or more official, writings. I hope that you can see that by merely adding a word here and there, or changing it for another, I made your text more “alive” and interesting to read. I also combined a few of your shorter sentences into longer, more descriptive, and more readable ones. Finally, I would have used the term, “landlord,” but currently, that word is sexist, thus my use of the more neutral term, “property owner” above. In America, however, practically everyone would know that your landlord is the person (man or woman) who is renting you a room or an apartment. Once you improve your vocabulary, and learn more about sentence structure, you, too, should be able to do such changes with ease! It is a process, so take your time, and allow it to happen naturally. Best of luck.

Dec 2

I’m writing sentences every day for writing practice.

But I’m worried about that I don’t have a story to write because my life is so repetitive

The sentences are getting shorter and feel simple.

Anyway, to write down today’s routine, I got up early and then I went to the school.

I did my best to listen in class.

I think that I don’t know a lot of vocabulary when I was listening in class.

From now on, I have to study vocabulary too.

I had a lunch with my friend and then I came back home.

My host mom is always at home

Now, I live away from my family but, I don’t feel alone.

Because my host mom is here.

I am always thankful for my host mom.

I’ll take a rest for a bit and then I’m going to go to the gym.

After work out, I’m going to review what I learned today.

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