Visiting a ferry
Last Tuesday, some students and I visited a ferry in St Malo. This ferry was huge, it can board up to 2000 passengers. It goes from St Malo to some cities in England, Ireland or Scotland and vice versa. We visited the room where the captain drives the boat. It is a huge room full of windows and many consoles. We also noticed that the ferry had a swimming pool, a huge restaurant, a bar and rooms dedicated to children for them to play. We went to the shop were prices were given in euros and in pounds. The items sold there are clothes, snacks, tourist items and wines. We were told that there were three different types of rooms for passengers. The smallest rooms - and the cheapest were small but well furnished. There were two beds and a bathroom but no window. There were rooms with more expensive prices but the most impressive were the most expensive rooms. They were composed of a space with two beds and a small table, a space for a small living room and even a private balcony. There was also a great bathroom. I remember we were told that this type of rooms cost around 150/200 euros per night. We talked to some employees to know what their working conditions were and how much they were paid.
We really enjoyed visiting this ferry. We stayed an hour and a half. It was really interesting and it was the first time I visited a ferry.
Below is a picture of the ferry we visited.
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Visiting a ferry
Last Tuesday, some students and I visited a ferry in St Malo. This ferry was huge, it can board up to 2000 passengers. It goes from St Malo to some cities in England, Ireland or Scotland and vice versa. We visited the room where the captain drives the boat. It is a huge room full of windows and many consoles. We also noticed that the ferry had a swimming pool, a huge restaurant, a bar and rooms dedicated to children for them to play. We went to the shop were prices were given in euros and in pounds. The items sold there are clothes, snacks, tourist items and wines. We were told that there were three different types of rooms for passengers. The smallest rooms - and the cheapest were small but well furnished. There were two beds and a bathroom but no window. There were rooms with more expensive prices but the most impressive were the most expensive rooms. They were composed of a space with two beds and a small table, a space for a small living room and even a private balcony. There was also a great bathroom. I remember we were told that this type of rooms cost around 150/200 euros per night. We talked to some employees to know what their working conditions were and how much they were paid.
We really enjoyed visiting this ferry. We stayed an hour and a half. It was really interesting and it was the first time I visited a ferry.
Below is a picture of the ferry we visited.
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Our Visit to a Ferry
Last Tuesday, some students and I visited a ferry in Saint-Malo (aka St Malo).* This ferry was huge, as it can board up to 2000 passengers. It goes from St Malo to various cities in England, Ireland, or Scotland, and vice versa. We visited the room—the bridge--where the captain steers the boat. It is a huge room full of windows and many consoles. We also noticed that the ferry has a swimming pool, a huge restaurant, a bar, and playrooms for the children. We went to the shop where prices were both in euros and in pounds. The items sold there are clothes, wines, snacks, and, of course, tourist items.
Passengers could choose from three different types of rooms we were told. The least expensive, but smallest room was still a well-furnished one, although petite, as it had two beds, a bathroom, but no window. There were larger rooms that naturally cost more, but the most impressive and expensive were the first-class rooms. They came with two beds, a small table, a small living room, a large bathroom, and even a private balcony! I remember being informed that this type of rooms cost around 150/200 euros per night. We also talked with some employees to discover how their working conditions were and how much they were paid. My students and I only stayed on board approx. an hour and a half, but we really enjoyed visiting this ferry. It was not only an incredibly interesting and informative experience, but also a first-time one for me.
Hi, Cilia! Good job! Your writing is much more natural now! Be happy! As always, “Whatever change I made…”
Hmm…, how do I explain this properly? Just because you are no longer on the ferry does not mean it has changed. It is still the same size. It “was” not huge then, but a different size now. Admittedly, we (native speakers) often speak that way, out of laziness, bad habit, etc. However, when writing, you should use the present tense for “eternal truths.” Later on, you write about the room where the captain steers the boat, and you wrote, “It is a huge room…” Why the difference in tense from the size of the ferry? Regardless, be consistent. I hope that you can see my point…
Which is correct—were prices or where prices?
Finally, quite a few of your sentences were in the “passive voice.” In English, we typically write in the “active voice” as it makes for better sentences, as well as for better reading.
*The spelling for this came in so many different forms (with a hyphen, without, etc.) that I could not determine which was correct…
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Visiting a ferry
Last Tuesday, some students and I visited a ferry in St Malo. This ferry was huge, it can board up to 2000 passengers. It goes from St Malo to some cities in England, Ireland or Scotland and vice versa. We visited the room where the captain drives the boat. It is a huge room full of windows and many consoles. We also noticed that the ferry had a swimming pool, a huge restaurant, a bar and rooms dedicated to children for them to play. We went to the shop where prices were given in euros and in pounds. The items sold there are clothes, snacks, tourist items and wines. We were told that there were three different types of rooms for passengers. The smallest rooms - and the cheapest were small but well furnished. There were two beds and a bathroom but no window. There were rooms with more expensive prices but the most impressive were the most expensive rooms. They were composed of a space with two beds and a small table, a space for a small living room and even a private balcony. There was also a great bathroom. I remember we were told that this type of room cost around 150/200 euros per night. We talked to some employees to know what their working conditions were and how much they were paid.
We really enjoyed visiting this ferry. We stayed an hour and a half. It was really interesting and it was the first time I visited a ferry.
Below is a picture of the ferry we visited.
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