School camp
My eldest son left for the school camp today. He will stay two nights and come back on Friday. It’s depends on the parents to let their child to join to the camp or not. Most of the students are so exited to go this camp. But my son didn’t want to go because he doesn’t have good friends in his class. We understand that it would be hard for him to stay at the camp in that situation. On the other hand, it would be a good opportunity for him to interact with his classmates and have some fun with them. It’s totally depends on him, but we decided to let him go. I’m still worry about him, but I hope he will be able to enjoy his camp even for a little bit.
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School Camp
My eldest son left for school camp today. He will stay there two nights and come back on Friday. It was entirely up to the parents to let their child go to the camp or not. Most of the students were so excited about attending this camp, but my son was reluctant to go because he does not have many good friends in his class. We recognized and understood that it would be hard for him to enjoy staying at the camp in that situation. On the other hand, though, we felt that it would be a good opportunity for him to interact with more of his other classmates, and possibly, to learn more about, and to have some fun with them. How much fun he will have while he is there totally depends on him, but we decided it would be best to have him at least go. To be sure, I am still worried about him, but overall, even if it is just a little, I also hope he will be able to enjoy his time at this camp.*/**
Hi, Taiji. Good job! Whatever changes I made were to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, to clarify your thoughts, and for ease of reading. My sincerest apologies if I have misinterpreted. I hope that this helps you. Jonathan.
*Admittedly, most of my changes go to style rather than grammatical errors, so you should not think that you had done anything wrong. I easily understood everything that you want to tell me, as the reader, so you are expressing yourself well enough in English. However, pay more attention to the use of tense, especially past tense. Finally, while you will hear it in speech all the time, when writing, either use “little” or “bit,” but not both together, as it is redundant.
**Even if he seemed uncomfortable about going, I am sure he will enjoy his time at camp. Besides, dealing with unfamiliar settings is part of growing up, so the sooner he starts, the better off he will be.
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