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Aging Although China has made a great stride in the development of economy and technology ,it's an indisputable reality that China is entering an aging era demographically. January 1 2016 did not only summon the coming of a new year,but also a new policywhich says farewell to the family planning in China . The implement of the family planning means Chinese couples are allowed to have a second child, however, on the other hand,it also shows the increasing aging issue in Chinese society. An aging era related to a society with more people growing older while less people are given to birth, It has bought a spectrum of problems to our society and economy. Firstly,the number of left-behind elderly is increasing,which attributed to their children have to go out for finding a better job that can make enough money to support the basic life of their parents go to the children and themselves . Consequently,fewer care and family happiness the left behind elderly get in their originally solitary twilight years. Secondly,great pressure was post on the adults for they are in a dilemma in which their parents and children are in all great need both in money and life. Sandwiched between two generations,the middle age bear great pain and panic physically and spiritually. Thirdly,the rising life expectancy combined with the stingy pension and provisions for the older makes life especially hard for the elderly. To solve those problems,moral basic and practical ways rather than verbal praise should be taken into consideration. The infrastructures for the elderly should be more perfect by the government. Moreover,the newly rising industries should be encouraged to invest in rural area for which the middle-age can be capable of working in their hometown and keeping company with the elderly.

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Although China has made a great stride in the development of economy and technology ,it's an indisputable reality that China is entering an aging era demographically. January 1 2016 did not only summon the coming of a new year,but also a new policywhich says farewell to the family planning in China . The implementation of the family planning means Chinese couples are allowed to have a second child, however, on the other hand,it also shows the increasing aging issue in Chinese society.
An aging era related to a society with more people growing older while less people are giving birth, It has bought a spectrum of problems to our society and economy. Firstly,the number of left-behind elderly is increasing,which is attributed to their children who have to go out for finding a better job that can help them make enough money to support the basic life of their parents go to the children and themselves (I didn't understand) . Consequently,less care and family happiness for the left behind elderly get in their originally olitary who are already solitary in their twilight years. Secondly,great pressure was put on the adults which puts them in a dilemma when both their parents and children are in great need of both money and life. Sandwiched between two generations,the middle age bears great pain and panic physically and spiritually. Thirdly,the rising life expectancy combined with the stingy pension and provisions for the older makes life especially hard for the elderly.
To solve those problems,moral basic and practical ways rather than verbal praise should be taken into consideration. The infrastructures for the elderly should be more perfect by the government. Moreover,the newly rising industries should be encouraged to invest in rural area for which the middle-age can be capable of working in their hometown and keeping company with the elderly.
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I guess whether there is a possibility that my writing is too long so that you guys are not reluctant to correct it. >3< But,those writing were the preparation for postgraduate qualifying examination in which each writing is required more than 300 words, so I have to write those long writings . Thank you very much if you can correct my writing.

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