I'd very appreciate it if you can correct my writing
my views on the NEET
In recent years,The vicious term-NEET-has attracted much social attention.It refers to"Not in Education,Employment or Training." This phenomenon is widely taking place in modern society,in which a gallery/variety/range of changes are involved. The NEET produce a gloomy atmosphere in entire society, not only are the NEET plunged into a vicious circulation of self-doubt
and afflicted by the torment driven by the failure of fulfilling their parents' expectations and the contrast to/with the peers who run a good business, but also the NEET 's negative and unambitious living conditions to some extent was are largely responsible for the slowdown of the national economy.
The plight of NEET may attribute to a host of reason. Firstly,lacking of detail career planning during the period of University,students are not ambitions in getting some self-development or social experience. Therefore, they lost the golden time of improving occupational skills and professional knowledge, which contribute to their future success in finding a job. Secondly, the current University curriculum did not much in guiding and helping students's career planning. Many textbooks are full of theories, but are poorly equipped with practical skills, which are urgently needed in their jobs. Thirdly, as the high-tech industries has grown and the old traditional industries has declined in recent years. Consequently, the competition rose in all walks of life.
To tackle this problem, a spectrum of suggestions have been offered. It is better for students to identify their career planning as soon as possible, and students are encouraged to start their own businesses from scratch. Moreover the life of University is not as leisure as we were told and dreamed before the college entrance examination and career planning is one of the most important factors that we can surviving in today's social mechanism. Finally, volunteering job and part-time job can be taken to enrich their working experience and a useful springboard for their future job.
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I'd very appreciate it if you can correct my writing
my views on the NEET
In recent years,The vicious term-NEET-has attracted much social attention.It refers to "Not in Education,Employment or Training." This phenomenon is widely taking place in modern society,in which a gallery/variety/range of changes are involved. The NEETs produce a gloomy atmosphere withn the [or: throughout the] entire society. Not only are the NEETs plunged into a vicious circulation cycle of self-doubt
and are afflicted by the torment driven by the failure of fulfilling their parents' expectations and the stark contrast to/with between them and their peers who run a successful businesses good business, but also the NEET 's negative and unambitious living conditions are, to some extent, was are largely responsible for the slowdown of the national economy.
The plight of the NEETs may be attributed to a host of reasons. Firstly, the lacking of detailed career planning during the period of University leads to students are not being ambitions in getting some acquiring self-development or social experience. Therefore, they lost the golden lose precious time of improving occupational skills and professional knowledge, which contribute to their future success in finding a job.
Secondly, the current University curriculum did not doesn't do much in to guideing and helping students's with their career planning. Many textbooks are full of theories, but are poorly equipped with practical skills, which are urgently needed in their jobs.
Thirdly, as the high-tech industries has grown and the old traditional industries has have declined in recent years, as a consequence, consequently, the competition for jobs has risen rose in all walks of life.
To tackle this problem, a spectrum of suggestions have has been offered. It is better for students to identify their career planning as soon as possible, and students are encouraged to start their own businesses from scratch.
Moreover, the life of a University student is not as leisurely as we were told and dreamed of before taking the college entrance examination and career planning is one of the most important factors that we can do to survive surviving in today's social mechanism.
Finally, volunteering job and part-time jobs can be taken to enrich their working experience and be a useful springboard for their future job.
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Is there anyone who can correct my writing,please?
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