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Building walls If I had to summarise the last decade with only one word I would use "wall". In the last century, after WW2, we tried to demolish as many walls as we could; I am not only referring to the famous Berlin Wall: the UN was formed, the EU was born and a series of political and economic deals were signed. We had the Cold War, sure, but even then there was a clear sense of unity: East vs West, not everybody against everybody else; furthermore, I am sure that no one ever thought the Cold War to be of any good. What about now, then? Why are we forgetting where divisions brought us? Does the proverb not say "Unity is strength"? Yet the UK is leaving EU, a choice that - at least for now - is clearly damaging its economy; the USA is losing interest in foreign politics and the president himself talks about building walls. My own people want to reject desperate refugees that are escaping from war, because they think they will steal their job. They, a group of extremely poor people that comes from absolute poverty and often does not even know the language. *They* will sit in our offices, sell to our costumers, treat our patients. As if. Others think they will increase the crime rate, and yet there is no statistical evidence of that other than the media igniting this belief for a couple of extra views. I know this is a controversial topic, but this is exactly the reason why I want to talk about it: we are normalising division, celebrating it, even. Will we only unite when, as always, time will bring us the bill to pay?

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Building walls

If I had to summarize summarise the last decade with only one word I would use "wall". In the last century, after WW2, we tried to demolish as many walls as we could; I am not only referring to the famous Berlin Wall: the UN was formed, the EU was born and a series of politic political and economic deals were signed. We had the Cold War, sure, but even then there was a clear sense of unity: East vs West, not everybody against everybody else; furthermore, I am sure that no one ever thought the Cold War to be of any good.

What about now, then? Why are we forgetting where divisions brought us? Does the proverb not say "Unity is strength"? Yet the UK is leaving EU, a choice that - at least for now - is clearly damaging its economy; the USA is losing interest in foreign politics and the president himself talks about building walls. My own people want to reject desperate refugees that are escaping from war, because they think they will steal their job. They, a group of extremely poor people that comes from absolute poverty and often does not even know the language. *They* will seat sit in our offices, sell to our costumers, treat our patients. As if. Others think they will increase the crime rate, and yet there is no statistical evidence of that other than the media igniting this belief for a couple of extra views.

I know this is a controversial topic, but this is exactly the reason why I want to talk about it: we are normalizing normalising division, celebrating it, even. Will we only unite when, as always, time will bring us the bill to pay?

US English usually use the 'z' in their words, whereas British English tends to use the 's'.
People (like la gente) is singular
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Building walls

If I had to summarise the last decade with only one word I would use "wall". In the last [half] century, after WW2, we tried to demolish as many walls as we could; I am not only referring to the famous Berlin Wall: the UN was formed, the EU was born and a series of political and economic deals were signed. * We had the Cold War, sure, but even then there was a clear sense of unity: East vs West, not everybody against everybody else; furthermore, I am sure that no one ever thought the Cold War to be of any good. no one thought (or thinks) the Cold War did any good.
What about now, then? Why are we forgetting where divisions brought us? Does the proverb not say "Unity is strength"? Yet the UK is leaving the EU, a choice that - at least for now - is clearly damaging its economy; the USA is losing interest in foreign politics and the president himself talks about building walls. My own people want to reject desperate refugees that who are escaping from war, because they think they will steal their job jobs. They, a group of extremely poor people that comes from absolute poverty and often does not even know the language. *They* They will sit in our offices, sell to our costumers, customers, treat our patients. As if. Others think they will increase the crime rate, and yet there is no statistical evidence of that other than the media igniting this belief for a couple of extra views. *
I know this is a controversial topic, but this is exactly [I might say, precisely] the reason why I want to talk about it: we are normalising division, celebrating it, even [I would say ", even celebrating it"]. * Will we only unite when, as always, time will bring brings us the bill to pay [you might eliminate "to pay"]?

Very good! These are mostly points of style which I wouldn't worry about much (and I will let you take your pick of British or American spelling :) ) A couple other ones relating to the asterisks:

*Be careful not to overuse colons/semicolons. I think you could easily begin a new sentence with "I am not only referring..." Again, I would probably cut down the Cold War sentence. Perhaps begin afresh with "Furthermore", and maybe make it longer so as to better stand on its own. I don't think you've used anything incorrectly but I think it could be more natural.
* I would avoid having both "that" and "this [belief]" referring to the same thing; I'd use "this" rather than "that" as you've just been talking about it. You can also cut one out, so: "and yet there is no [statistical] evidence of this except sensational media stories written to garner views..."
*It's not clear to me why "we have normalized division" is the "exact" reason you want to talk about it: because you feel that your viewpoint has become the minority one and therefore needs to be made more public? What's the relation of this to the fact that "I know this is a controversial topic..." ? I might try to make this a bit clearer.

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