some description about my childhood
When I was 7 years old, I used to live in a quiet village with my grandparents. I still remember neighbors shared peaches with other other, all kids gathered secretly in a small garden and my puppy “creamy” run against the sunset. Our door was open for every one. As Tao Yuanming, a high-calire poet in estern Jin Dynasty once wrote in The story of the peach garde: “The road intersected across with each other and the fishingman even could hear the sounds of dogs’ barking and the chicken’s singing.” At that time, every man was a piece of the continent, a part of the main.
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some description about my childhood
When I was 7 years old, I used to live in a quiet village with my grandparents. I still remember neighbors shared peaches with other other, all kids gathered secretly in a small garden and my puppy “creamy” Creamy running in against the sunset. Our door was open for to every one. As Tao Yuanming, a high-calibre poet in eastern Jin Dynasty once wrote in "The Story of the Peach Garden": “The roads intersected across with each other and the fishingman fisherman even could hear the sounds of dogs’ barking and the chicken’s singing.” At that time, every man was a piece of the continent, a part of the main.
This is very good! most of my corrections were regarding spelling, but there are two that I'd like to explain more:
- We always capitalize names, and we don't put them in quotation marks. Therefore, I changed "creamy" to Creamy, since that was the puppy's name.
- As far as titles go, we capitalize all the important words in the title, not just the first word (depending on your stylebook, but this is usually the case for poetry). We also put the title of a poem in quotation marks; titles of longer pieces of writing are italicized.
Overall, good work!
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some description about my childhood
When I was 7 years old, I used to live in a quiet village with my grandparents. I still remember neighbors shared peaches with other other, all kids gathered secretly in a small garden and my puppy “creamy” running against/in the sunset. Our door was open for every one. As Tao Yuanming, a high-calibre poet in estern Jin Dynasty once wrote in The story of the peach garde: “The roads intersected across with each other and the fishingman fisherman even could hear the sounds of dogs’ barking and the chicken’s singing.” At that time, every man was a piece of the continent, a part of the main.
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