The night walk
On Saturday evening I wasn't going to go anywhere when my stepfather Andrey called me and invited me to the theater. My mum had caught a cold, and he didn't have a company. It was a surprise for me, and I agreed to go.
When I arrived at the theater, the play had been starting. It was quite a boring performance. The main character was played by a very famous old actress, but I didn't know who she is, so I wasn't very impressed. I only liked an actor who played a devil. He spoke in a funny voice and made the audience laughing.
When the play had finished, Andrey offered to walk me home, but I refused. I went home alone through the empty streets and squares. There was very quiet weather with heavy fog and leaves falling from the trees very slowly. The night walk has become the most exciting feeling of that evening.
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The night walk
On Saturday evening, I wasn't going to go anywhere when my stepfather, Andrey, called me and invited me to the theater. My mum had caught a cold, and he didn't have a company. It was a surprise, for me, and I but I agreed to go.
When I arrived at the theater, the play had been starting already started. It was quite a boring performance. The main character was played by a very famous old actress, but I didn't know who she is was, so I wasn't very impressed. I only liked an actor who played a devil. He spoke in a funny voice and made the audience laughing.
When the play had finished, Andrey offered to walk me home, but I refused. I went home alone through the empty streets and squares. There was very quiet weather was very quiet, with heavy fog and leaves slowly falling from the trees very slowly. The night walk has become the most exciting feeling of held the most excitement of the evening.
Good job! Most of my corrections were for style. For example, "had been starting" is understandable, but a native speaker would say "had started" because we usually don't think of a "start" as continuous. I changed "and I agreed" to "but I agreed" for the same reason. A native speaker would understand what you meant, but we wouldn't say it that way.
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The night walk
On Saturday evening, I wasn't going anywhere, when my stepfather Andrey called me and invited me to go to the theater. My mum had caught a cold, and he didn't have company. It was a surprise for me, and I agreed to go.
When I arrived at the theater, the play had started. It was quite a boring performance. The main character was played by a very famous old actress, but I didn't know who she is, so I wasn't very impressed. I only liked an actor who played a devil. He spoke in a funny voice and made the audience laugh.
When the play had finished, Andrey offered to walk me home, but I refused. I went home alone through the empty streets and squares. There was very quiet (wind?) with heavy fog and leaves falling from the trees very slowly. The night walk was the most exciting part of that evening.
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On Saturday evening I wasn't going to go anywhere when my stepfather Andrey called me and invited me to the theater. My mum had caught a cold, and he didn't have a company. It was a surprise for me, and I agreed to go.
When I arrived at the theater, the play had already started. It was quite a boring performance. The main character was played by a very famous old actress, but I didn't know who she is, so I wasn't very impressed. I only liked an actor who played a devil. He spoke in a funny voice and made the audience laugh.
When the play had finished, Andrey offered to walk me home, but I refused. I went home alone through the empty streets and squares. There was very quiet weather with heavy fog and leaves falling from the trees very slowly. The night walk was the most exciting feeling of that evening.
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