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Deer collision My friends and I went on a trip to northern Michigan last weekend. There are vast forests, so we hoped we could see some wild animals, such as deers. Of course, we have heard a lot about deer collision when driving, but we did hope we could see deers alive, not dead. I think one of the most fortunate things happened to me is that this time, our car was so closed to kill a deer, but we didn't. At that time, I was sitting in the front passenger seat, texting to my friends. When I had just finished one text, I raised my head and saw a deer passing by. I swear, it was just one centimeter away that we almost hit the deer. I was scared, and also I was so happy that a deer didn't die in front of my eyes. I met another friend two days ago, she and her friends also went to northern Michigan. However, she was not as lucky as me. Their car hit a fawn in the morning, which made them feel upset all day. I understand that most of the roads can be counted as expressways, which have an at least 55 mph speed limit, thus making avoiding a sudden deer impossible. Anyway, I sincerely hope people can find some way to reduce deer collisions.

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Deer collision (deer-vehicle collision or Dear Deer)

My friends and I went on a trip to northern Michigan last weekend. There are (were) vast forests, (and) so we (really) hoped (that) we could (find) some wild animals such as deer. (Actually we did) heard a lot about (deer-vehicle collision) when driving, but, (of course),we did (hope to find them) alive (rather then dead) !

I think one of the most fortunate things happened to (us) (was) that this time, our car was (once) so close to a deer, but (there was not collision). At that time (moment), I was sitting in front passenger seat, texting to my friends. When I had just finished (the last) text, I raised my head and saw a deer passed by. I swear, it was just one centimeter (more) that we (would) hit the deer. I was scared, (but) I was also very happy that the deer didn't die in front of my eyes.

I met another friend two days ago, (although) she and her friends (also visited) Northern Michigan they were not as lucky as me. Their car hit a fawn in the morning, which made them (to) feel (upset for the whole day). I understand that most of the roads (were re-counted) as expressways- having a 55 mph speed limit- thus making it very hard to avoid (any) animal (that is getting close suddenly). Anyway, I sincerely hope that people can find ways to reduce (minimize this kind of incident).

In my opinion the story is quite hard to express, I appreciate how you try to express your experience in detail. With a lengthy story like this, you can extend your paragraph and use more precise words to express your feelings.

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