JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON September 28th I would like someone to correct my diary (or to tell me the natural way of saying some things below. But I would be happy even if you JUST CORRECT my entry). Here,

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JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON September 28th I would like someone to correct my diary (or to tell me the natural way of saying some things below. But I would be happy even if you JUST CORRECT my entry). Here, I might write in spoken English, possibly, because I want to improve not just my writing skills, but also my spoken English. Could do that for me, please? JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON September 28th My head hurts a little bit right now, but I know the reason why it happen to me. Yes, It may because is that I was sleeping in until just now. I honestly can't have a chance of sleeping in recently with my busy work. And I don't managed to make time to take enough sleep. Yes this might causes my performance of the job lower, and I of course really know well. Bu the way, I see what happened to my job in the furture. The industry where I work now, is seemingly said like that kind of dying industry. The reason is really simple, I guess. It's because we need to tons of man power than you guys think. I mean we need to work without some lest everyday, so then, it is really necessarily that those who work there begin to think quitting, you know? Yes, me is one of them, actually. But I like my job and my job now is just for me, just so you know. But I am thinking the industry where I work now has no future. I don't make sure if I could work lively than just me. Actually, I want to work in area, kind of web designer. But I don't have much experiences on this area, so can I work in this area if I find employment?

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JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON September 28th (writing about my headache) My head hurts a little bit right now, but I know why. Yes, it may be because I was sleeping in until just now. I honestly haven't had a chance to sleep in recently with my busy work schedule. And I struggle to find the time to get enough sleep. Yes, this might cause lower performance on the job on my part, and I of course know this well. By the way, I can see what will happen to my job in the future. The industry where I work now, is a seemingly dying industry. The reason is quite simple, I guess. It's because we need way less man power than you would think. I mean we have to work without some at least everyday, so is it really necessary? It makes sense that those who work there begin to think about quitting, you know? Yes, I am one of them, actually, But I like my job and my job now is just for me, just so you know. But I am thinking the industry where I work now has no future. I am not sure if I could work a job that is more lively than just me. Actually, I want to work in the area of web design. But I don't have much experience in this area, so would I be able to work in this area if I find employment?

Hi Taichi,

Please see my corrections in bold below:

JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON September 28th

I would like someone to correct my diary (or to tell me the natural way of saying some things below. But I would be happy even if you JUST CORRECT my entry). Here, I might write in spoken English, possibly, because I want to improve not just my writing skills, but also my spoken English. Could do that for me, please?

JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON September 28th

My head hurts a little bit right now, but I know why. Yes, it may be because ~~is that~~ I was sleeping in until just now. I honestly haven't had a chance to sleep in recently with my busy work schedule. And I struggle to find the time to get enough sleep. Yes, this might cause lower performance on the job on my part, and I of course ~~really~~ know this well. By the way, I can see what will happen to my job in the future. The industry where I work now, is a seemingly dying industry. The reason is quite simple, I guess. It's because we need to way less of man power than you would think. I mean, we have to work without some at least everyday, so ~~then,~~ is it really necessary? It makes sense that those who work there begin to think about quitting, you know? Yes, I am one of them, actually. But I like my job and my job now is just for me, just so you know. But I am thinking the industry where I work now has no future. I am not sure if I could work a job that is more lively than just me. Actually, I want to work in the area of web design. But I don't have much experience in this area, so would I be able to work in this area if I find employment?

Just a note: when writing in English, we cannot start a sentence with the word "and" or the word "but". However, I know you mentioned you were writing spoken English. For this reason, I did not correct these words because we do tend to start a sentence with "and" or "but" when we are speaking.

Great job with this! Please let me know if you have any questions about my corrections. Thank you!

Savannah

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