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Could you tell me how natural this paragraph sounds and how well written it is, please?
She whispered to me: "Come later to the Wailing Wall behind my barrack. ¡We will be alone for ar least two minutes!" So we let go of hands and ran, even though it was worth a "Damn sluts!".
At the appointed time I crawled out of my barrack which was full of people. I didn't even think this could cause to me a beating, carry me to the punishment cell, or even to death.
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The sentence structure was a little awkward, but nothing too serious. Below is my corrections:
She whispered to me: "Come later to the Wailing Wall behind my barracks. We will be alone for at least two minutes!" So we let go of each others' hands and ran, even though it was worth a "Damn sluts!".
At the appointed time I crawled out of my barracks which was full of people. I didn't even think this could cause me a beating, get me carried to the punishment cell, or even my death.
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Writing in English
Hi there,
Could you tell me how natural this paragraph sounds and how well written it is, please?
She whispered to me: "Come later to the Wailing Wall behind my barrack. We would be alone for at least two minutes!" So we let go of our hands and ran. It was worth a hearing "Damn sluts!".
At the appointed time, I crawled in of my barrack which was conjested (same thing as full of people) . I didn't even think of my consequences that it could possibly lead me a beating, punishment cell, or even death.
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