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Day 001 Sentence making practice Sleeping is for the weak. You have already found the secret for eternal life and lack the necessity to slumber When the sand storm hits the city, pedestrians nuzzle their chins into their breasts in an effort to escape vile wind and siwrls of gritty dust. He is such a studious student and his books are dense with highlights and annotations. He has an unassuming presence, belying his unflappalbe intelligence of a mathematician. He maintains an expression detached and preoccupied, as if too impatient for the future to commit his full attention to the present. I'm just an ordinary person. There's nothing special or memorable about me. I always blend into any crowd. This was one of his most prolific periods in his career. He wrote voluminous works on the pitfalls of communism. Concepts in physics that seemed abstract to me took on, for him, concret forms; they were like things he could touch, inducing a "druglike euphoria." I wish to hone my writing by reading all the famous English books I can get my hands on and absorb the thoughts and wisdom in them. In ancient times, there were no electronic dictionaries. Learning a foreign language was quite challenging. People had to pore over a paper dictionary to get through original works. Great literary works make readers face the situations that present equally unconscionable choices on either side of a moral fulcrum.

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Hi Kimmi,
Here are my corrections:

Day 001 Sentence making practice

Sleeping is for the weak.
You have already found the secret for eternal life and don't need to rest.

When the sand storm hits the city, pedestrians tuck their chins into their chests in an effort to escape the vile wind and swirls of gritty dust.

He is such a studious student and his books are covered/replete with highlights and annotations.

He has an unassuming presence, belying his unflappable intelligence as a mathematician.

He maintains an expression detached and preoccupied expression, as if too impatient for the future to commit his full attention to the present.

I'm just an ordinary person. There's nothing special or memorable about me. I always blend into any crowd.

This was one of the most prolific periods in his career. He wrote voluminous works on the pitfalls of communism.

Concepts in physics that seemed abstract to me for him took on concrete forms; it was as if he could physically take hold of them, inducing in himself a "druglike euphoria."

I wish to hone my writing by reading all the famous English books I can get my hands on and absorb the thoughts and wisdom they contain.

In ancient times, there were no electronic dictionaries. Learning a foreign language was quite challenging. People had to pore over a paper dictionary to get through original works.

Great literary works confront readers with situations that present equally unconscionable choices on either side of a moral fulcrum.
fulcrum means centre or heart of something (He is the fulcrum of the England football team) so it's not quite right here. I would suggest: moral divide

I can see you've made an effort to really practise some advanced vocabulary here, and for the most part you've been pretty successful. Well done!

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