hello guys ,can you correct me please?
Good afternoon,
My name is Séverine and I am a girl.
I come from France and I live in France also.
I am 35 years old.
I speak French and a bit of English.
I'm a waitress.I work in restaurant Italian.
On wednesday ,It's the children's day in my restaurant.
There are many who come eat a children's meal.
The week-end,there are many peoples because they aren't work.They are go out between friends for to drink a glass or for to eat.
In the moment,there are many peoples all the time because It's summer .
the peoples come also to looking for the pizzas ,pastas ,salades or burgers in take away .
They go with their meals to sit near beachs or the ports and profite the sun.
My restaurant is open from Tuesday to Saturday ,the noons and the evenings.
My favorit animals are the whales ,dolphins and orcas .
They are amazing and beautiful.
They come with their family all the time .
I travel fot to see them.
My favorit esportes is the biking.
I do the biking in the forest ,the city and the campaingn also.
Myboyfriend is very nice with me and very romantic.
He's beautiful ,tall and thin .
He has green eyes ,the pale skin and brown hair.
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hello guys ,can you correct me please?
Good afternoon,
My name is Séverine and I am a girl.
I come from France and I live in France also.that´s the place where I live too.
I speak French and a little bit of English.
I'm a waitress.I work in an Italian restaurant.
Wednesday It's the special day for children in my restaurant.
There are many who come to eat a meal for children.
On the week-end many people come to us because they aren't working.They go out for a drink or to dinner with their friends.
At the moment there are so many people every day because It's summer .
The people come also to order pizzas, pasta ,salads or burgers to take away .
They take away their meals on the seaside, to the wharfs and enjoy the sun.
My restaurant is open from Tuesday to Saturday, at noon and on the evening.
My favorite animals are whales ,dolphins and orcas .
They are amazing and beautiful.
They come with their packs all the time.
I travel to watch them.
My favorite sport is biking.
I do biking in the forest, downtown and in the countryside as well.
My boyfriend is very nice to me and very romantic.
He's handsome, tall and slim.
He has green eyes, pale skin and brown hair.
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Hello guys, can you correct me please?
Good afternoon,
My name is Séverine and I am 35 years old. I come from France and I also live in France. I speak French and a bit of English.
I'm a waitress and I work in an Italian restaurant. On Wednesday, it's children's day in my restaurant. There are many who come to eat a children's meal.
At the week-end,there are many people because they don't work.They go out with friends to drink a glass or to eat. At the moment,there are many people all the time because It's summer. The peoples come also to look for the pizzas, pastas, salads or burgers to take away. They go with their meals to sit near beaches or the ports and enjoy the sun. My restaurant is open from Tuesday to Saturday, in the afternoons and the evenings.
My favorite animals are whales ,dolphins and orcas. They are amazing and beautiful.They come with their family all the time. I travel a lot to see them.
My favorite sport is cycling. I ride in the forest, the city and also the countryside.
My boyfriend is very nice with me and very romantic. He's beautiful, tall and thin. He has green eyes, pale skin and brown hair.
Hello Severine,
A very nice introduction, please be careful with spacing in English as with French there is a space after commas and full stops, not before. I have also put your sentences into paragraphs to make it more natural.
Best wishes
Bob
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