About my favorite movie ''Harry Potter''
I like watching movie. Harry Potter sereise are one of my favorite movies.
Today I'll explaine the story of Harry Potter.
This is the story of a man in a magic world. When Harry Potter was a baby, his parents were killed by a dark wizard named Voldemord with a magic but he could survived.
He was raised by a horrible uncle and his family. They told him that he was not only a wizard but also a surviver who knocked down Voldemord when he was 11 years old.
After that he grew up, went to a magic school and made amazing friends there.
He tried to revenge Voldemort with them. Finally, they beat Voldemort.
My favorite episode is ''Harry Potter and the philosofer's stone''. I really enjoyed the scene they were playing quiddich and walk around Hogsmead.
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About my favorite movie ''Harry Potter''
I like watching movies. The Harry Potter series is one of my favorites.
Today I'll explain the story of Harry Potter.
This is the story of a man in a magical world. When Harry Potter was a baby, his parents were killed by a dark wizard named Voldemort with a magic curse but he could survived.
He was raised by his horrible uncle and his family. They* told him that he was not only a wizard but also a survivor who knocked down Voldemort when he was 1 years old.
After Harry grew up, he went to a magic school (named Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry) and made amazing friends there.
With his friends, he tried to take revenge on Voldemort. Finally, they beat Voldemort.
My favorite movie is ''Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone''. I really enjoyed the scene where they were playing Quidditch and walk around Hogsmead*.
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They* - I would suggest being more clear here. Who told him that he was a wizard? Do you want to say Hagrid or be more vague and say something like "The wizard community".
Hogsmead* - Sorry I'm being a total nerd, but I think you mean Diagon Alley! :)
I also love HP :)! My favorite movie was Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban.
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About my favorite movie ''Harry Potter''
I like watching movie movies. The Harry Potter sereise series are one some of my favorite movies.
Today I'll explaine explain the story of Harry Potter.
This is the story of a man in a magical world. When Harry Potter was a baby, his parents were killed by a dark wizard named Voldemord Voldemort with a magic but he could survived.
He was raised by a horrible uncle and his family. They told him that he was not only a wizard but also a surviver survivor who knocked down Voldemord Voldemort when he was 11 1 years old.
After that he grew up, went to a magic school and made amazing friends there.
He tried to take revenge on Voldemort with them. Finally, they beat Voldemort.
My favorite episode is ''Harry Potter and the philosofer's stone Philosopher's Stone''. I really enjoyed the scene where they were playing quiddich Quiddich and walk walked around Hogsmead.
Hello Saori! I enjoyed your summary of the Harry Potter series! I can feel your passion for the series through your writing!
I noticed you sometimes add an "e" to the end of words where it doesn't belong. I know this can be hard because English has many words that have a silent "e", but this is just something that more reading and writing practice should take care of.
Another tricky thing is with "survivor." It can be confusing how some words referring to people end with "er" and others with "or", but again this is just a matter or practice and learning to recognize which word uses which based on your own previous knowledge.
Also, I noticed that sometimes you spelled "voldemort" as "Voldemord" with a "d." In Japanese is his name written as "ヴォルデモート" or "ヴォルデモード"?
As for my correction on "Philosopher's Stone," Since it is in the title of the movie, those words should be capitalized. "Quiddich" is also capitalized as it is the name of a fictional sport, and therefore not considered a proper common word in English.
I really enjoyed your writing and would love to be able to continue helping you improve your English skills! Feel free to book a trial lesson with me to see if we would be a good match!
ちなみに僕は日本語も話せますから、伝えにくい事とかあればぜひ日本語で話してもオッケーですよ！
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I liked the Harry Potter movies too when I was young. I think that is a story of a child not a man. LOL.
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