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54 - Life choices Usually I compare a life choice to the beginning of a maze. We have in front of us multiple doors or paths and we must choose one. However, this labyrinth has a special rule: you cannot go back and you have to go on until you find a new crossroads. This is because when we make a decision in life we cannot really go back, because there will always be some consequences and the starting point will never be reachable again. Having said that, now I am going to tell you the criteria I use to choose which door to open. It's very simple: I try to pick the right one. The problem is that the right decision not always is the best one, though. Understanding which door is the best one for us is a grueling task, and often it is not possible a priori. But sometimes even a posteriori, because after making a decision we start thinking that one of the other doors was the right one, but we can not really know it. The only way would be to have made that decision, and not the one we made, but first, we cannot go back (it's the rule of the special maze where we live, as I have already said), and second, we can just image the consequence of that choice, but we do not have the ability to know the real implications. What do you think of the metaphor I have used in this notebook entry? And which door do you tend to choose?

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Hi, Antonello.

Great writing! You seem to be very fluent in the language. I just have some minor corrections and recommendations:


  1. Usually, I compare a life choice to the beginning of a maze. - a comma follows transitional devices like "usually, however, although, etc."
  2. This is because when we make a decision in life we cannot really go back, because there will always be some consequences and the starting point will never be reachable again. - This seems to be a run-on sentence. I recommend you write it like this: "This is because when we make a decision in life, we cannot really go back. There will always be consequences and we can never start over again." Reachable is not a word I would use when referring to a beginning or a starting point, especially in the context of your writing.
  3. But sometimes even a posteriori, because after making a decision we start thinking that one of the other doors was the right one, but we can not really know it. - These all seem to be hanging and run-on statements. You may write it like this: 'Sometimes, it is not even possible a posteriori. After making a decision, we start thinking that one of the other doors was the right one, but we cannot really know it."
  4. ...we can just image the consequence of that choice... - we can just imagine the consequence of that choice

Otherwise, great job!


Sincerely,

Dan
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54 - Life choices

Usually, I compare a life choice to the beginning of a maze. We have waiting before us multiple doors or paths and we must choose one. However, this labyrinth has a special rule: you cannot go back and you have to go on until you find a new path or make a decision at a crossroad. This is because when we make a decision in life we cannot really go back, because .There will always be some be consequences. and the starting point will never be reachable again. Having said that, now I am going to tell you the criteria I use to choose which door to open. It's very simple: I try to pick the right one. The problem is that the right decision not always is the best one, though. Understanding which path to take is often a daunting decision to have to make.and often it is not possible a priori. But sometimes even a posteriori, because after making a decision we start thinking that one of the other doors was the right one, but we can not really know it. The only way would be to have made that decision, and not the one we made, but first, we cannot go back (it's the rule of the special maze where we live, as I have already said), and second, we can just image the consequence of that choice, but we do not have the ability to know the real implications.

What do you think of the metaphor I have used in this notebook entry? And which door do you tend to choose?

Good metaphor, but you only need three short sentences to say all of what you said.
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I have just finished writing it. Check out my 56th notebook entry.
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54 - Life Choices

Usually I compare a life Choices in life -- something akin to when we are standing at the beginning entrance of a maze. We have in front of Before us, is a multitude of doors or paths and we must to choose but only one to trode upon. However, this labyrinth has a special rule: you cannot go back and you have to go on until you find a new crossroads. This is because When we make a decision is made in life, we cannot really go back, because there will always be some once a path is stepped upon, consequences are triggered and the that starting beginning point disappears -- only a fragment remains in our mind will never be reachable again. Having said that this, now I am going to tell you the criteria in which path a maze do not have doors but paths, otherwise won't be true to your example. I use to choose which door to take open. It's very simple: I try to Pick the right one! The problem is that the right decision may not always is be the best one, though. Understanding which door is the suits us best one for us is a grueling task. and More often it is not, possible there are no a priori clues to cull from. But Sometimes even in an a posteriori state, because after making a decision we start thinking that one of the other doors we may doubt the choice taken was not the right one. but We can not cannot really know what are the outcomes of the other paths. We can only conjecture in our fantasy and since a decision had already made, it is no longer possible to return where we came from; but to trudge forward on the current path until we hit the next crossroad. it. The only way would be to have made that decision, and not the one we made, but first, we cannot go back (it's the rule of the special maze where we live, as I have already said), and second, we can just image the consequence of that choice, but we do not have the ability to know the real implications.

Good metaphor.

  1. Don't repeat what you had said in the beginning unless it is for emphasis. Write it in a way to give more value to your essay.
  2. Don't use "let me tell you", sounds like you are talking down to the reader.
  3. Don't use too long sentences, you will bore your reader. Keep it simple. Don't be pedantic.
  4. If you want to write well, a recommended link to watch, https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vtIzMaLkCaM&fbclid=IwAR2F95IV98eR5GMYMLQdTsZer3Yyt51kLFlbnLqW0oAKx0XorGYBsohr58g
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