A Dinner with Her

A beautiful evening just happened yesterday. She had asked me to have dinner on Friday after we got off work. I agreed since I have always enjoyed it whenever we hang out together. We went to a Japanese restaurant, one that had received good recommendations on the internet. We talked about family, work stuff, and the air pollution from a fried chicken restaurant next to her house, which just had its grand opening, etc. After dinner was finished, instead of each of us paying our fair share, she then graciously took care of the entire bill to treat me for my birthday. I was both so surprised and grateful. She is so cute and incredibly thoughtful--I think I am falling in love.*

Hi Percy, Good job! Whatever changes I made were to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, to clarify your ideas, and for ease of reading. Sincerest apologies if I have misinterpreted! I hope that this helps you. J.

*In agreement with what "yama" mentioned, I, too, feel that “evening” works better as to the timeline involved. Furthermore, in English, we use nouns and pronouns as either the subject or object of a sentence. The pronoun “she” is generally used as a subject, but its form changes to “her” as an object. Typically, we also find object pronouns after prepositions (such as the word, with). As a result, your title should be “Dinner with her,” not “Dinner with she.”