T.V free
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Have you ever thought about living with out T.V ? It is seems quite impossible because people get addicted to it and it has a great profound effect on their daily life . On the artical, the author mentioned that, in the summer, she has once unplugged the T.V for a month , but now she made it more sophisticated than before when she decided to live the whole winter with out T.V . She was wondering if she would feel lonely or suffer a bad time, but what happened was totally different from her expectation . She actually succeed when she found herself spending more time with her friends with whom she used to spend less time before, reading more books , having enough time to sleep , and start doing volunteer work almost every week instead every few months. New experiments are difficult in the beginning but in time they get easier .
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T.V free
This is a summary of an artical(article) I have read.
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Have you ever thought about living with out T.V ?(TV?) It is seems quite impossible because people get addicted to it(,) and it has a great profound effect on their daily life . On the artical(In the article), the author mentioned that, in the summer, she has once unplugged the T.V(TV) for a month , but now she made it more sophisticated(Not sure what you mean here) than before when she decided to live the whole winter with out(without) T.V .(TV.) She was wondering if she would feel lonely or suffer a bad time, but what happened was totally different from her expectation . She actually succeed('succeeded' is the correct tense, but I don't think this is the correct word for what you mean to say) when she found herself spending more time with her friends with whom she used to spend less time before, reading more books , having enough time to sleep , and start doing volunteer work almost every week instead every few months(This is a run-on sentence. Break it into smaller sentences). New experiments are difficult in the beginning(,) but in time they get easier .
I enjoy life better without a TV. It's just a mindless time wasting device. Interesting entry :) I recommend breaking your sentences into shorter simple sentences. Let me know if you have any questions about my corrections.
-Jeff
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