HuaWei signed deal with Russian
Many countries are working to laungh a 5G-network ,and HuaWei is one of the few companies to make 5G-network complatial equipment.
American government blacklisted HuaWei as a threat in the national security.But Russia government made a deal with HuaWei to develop their internet.Chinese persident Xijing Pin finallised the deal when he visited in Russia last month.This is the most struck agreement which is worth more than 20 billion.
As a Chinese people,I am proud of HuaWei comany which is the few company can provide the high technology in the world.Many young people perfer to use Apple Iphone in the past years ,they thaught it is the Apple mobile whith the best quality,even they are willing to sell their kidney to buy a new Apple IPONE.What's more,it also represent they are the people who own the wealthy.However,whith the developing HuaWei today,more and more young generation have changed to their chocies.
From the phenonmen,we can know that the government should put more effort to the technology.It will be good for our development in the future.
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HuaWei signed a deal with Russian
Many countries are working to launch a 5G-network, and HuaWei is one of the few companies to make 5G-network complatial compatible equipment. The American government blacklisted HuaWei as a threat in the to national security, but the Russian government made a deal with HuaWei to develop their internet. The Chinese president Xijing Pin finallised the deal when he visited in Russia last month.This is the most struck [? I don't understand the intended meaning of this sentence - 'the most struck agreement' doesn't make sense in English] agreement which is worth more than 20 billion [you need to include a currency].
As a Chinese people person,I am proud of HuaWei comany which for being is one of the the few company companies in the world that can provide the high this sophisticated technology in the world. Many young people perfer prefer to use Apple's iPhone in the past few years, they thaught thought it is was the Apple mobile whith the best quality. even They are even willing to sell their kidney to buy a new Apple IPONE iPhone. What's more, it also represents they are the people who own the wealthy wealth, to own an iPhone. However, whith the developing technology of HuaWei today, more and more of the younger generation have changed to their chocies choices.
From this phenonmen phenomenon, we can know see that the government should put more effort into the technology. It will be good for our country's development in the future.
Well done, this is a great piece of writing. I have offered corrections where relevant and comments below :)
The main things to work on:
- Punctuation relates to the word before the punctuation mark and has a space after, for example the comma I have used comes after the word 'after' and then there is a space before the next word 'for'
- You will need to use an article for some nouns, e.g. the government, the president - there are many helpful articles on this online to learn more
- The final sentence of your first paragraph, I wasn't sure what your intended meaning was so didn't correct this. If you want to try and explain the meaning I am happy to help
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