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Please help me make this sound natural in a formal way It has been said “Home is where the heart is” and it is especially true for me since I come from an extensive family including my parents and five of my siblings who we really have close relationships and all of them live in my country. In fact, I have no relatives abroad, my whole family lives here and all of our properties are located in Iran. I have lived my entire life with my parents in our house so leaving them for a couple of years is hard as it stands. I love my city and despite the fact that it is a small town, it is a beautiful and great city to live in for me because most of my relatives live there and it has a very friendly environment. Moreover, I already have a lucrative job offer from the Burn and Wound Healing Research center, The Shiraz University of Medical Science that I have been working in for about 4 years, in addition, that I can work here on my own as a physiotherapist and I will never jeopardize this opportunity after graduation. Under no circumstances, I am willing to jettison these opportunities and happy life.

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Please help me make this sound natural in a formal way

It has been said /It is said that “Home is where the heart is." This saying rings especially true for me. I I come from a large family, and my parents, five siblings and I are very close( have a very close relationship). My whole family lives and all of our properties are located in Iran. In fact, I have no relatives abroad. I have lived my entire life with my parents in our house so leaving them for a couple of years would be hard as it stands. I love my city and despite the fact that it is small, it is a beautiful and great place to live in for me because most of my relatives live there and it has a very friendly environment. Moreover, I already have a lucrative job offer from the Burn and Wound Healing Research center at the (?)The Shiraz University of Medical Science whereI have been working in for about 4 years. In addition, I can work here on my own as a physiotherapist and I will never jeopardize this opportunity after graduation. Under no circumstances am I willing to jettison these opportunities and my happy life here.
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There is a well-known saying, “Home is where the heart is.” This is especially true for me, as I come from a large family consisting of my parents and five siblings. We all have not only managed to maintain our close relationships with one another, but also managed to maintain living nearby each other here in Iran.

In fact, I have no relatives living abroad, my entire family lives here, and all of our properties, are located in Iran. I have lived my entire life with my parents in their house, so under those circumstances, leaving them for any length of time, let alone, a couple of years, would be somewhat hard to do. I love my city, and despite it being a small town, for me, it is a beautiful place and a wonderful city to live in.

Moreover, I already have a lucrative job offer from the nearby Burn and Wound Healing Research center, which is part of The Shiraz University of Medical Science, and a place where I have been working at for approx. 4 years. In addition, since I know that I can work here on my own, as a physiotherapist, I would never do anything to jeopardize these opportunities after graduation. Therefore, since my life now, is a complete and a happy one, under no circumstances, can I ever envision changing it!* 

Hi, Bizhan. Good job! Whatever changes I made were to allow your sentences to sound more natural to native ears, to clarify your thoughts, and for ease of reading. Sincerest apologies if I have misinterpreted. I hope that this helps you. J.

*I am not sure that I made it more "formal", but I tried! (*-^)

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