上周发生的不高兴的事情... ^_^
(So, to practice my writing, I'd like to talk about somewhat of an unpleasant experience I had at a dim sum place last week. lol Please feel free to make any corrections as necessary. Thank you!)
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这家呀,服务态度差得不得了….. 上周我来这里买包馒头,我顺便问阿姨馒头是不是当天早上做的。她直到最后完全忽视我的问题,收到我的钱后她几乎是扔出了我买的东西,冷漠地说:“你喜欢就拿走。”
神情不高兴的我转身出门时,那位阿姨吵吵嚷嚷地用广东话骂我。这是对客人什么样的待遇啊?(可能因为我是只会国语的人..?无论怎样我是华人,你们也是华人,那我们都是同族同胞嘛!)觉得真遗憾。
我决定不再光顾这家卫生等级C的 “垃圾点心店”。
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上周发生的不高兴的事情... ^_^
上周发生的让人不高兴的事情("高兴“is a sentiment of person,so "高兴“can't be used to modify "事情”,we can say "让人不高兴”,to make sb unhappy)
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这家呀,服务态度差得不得了…..
上周我去了一家点心店,这家店呀, 服务态度差得不得了。(If we need to use a pronoun,the word which is substitute by pronoun should appear in preceding sentence.So ”点心店“ should appear
before "这”.
上周我来这里买包馒头,我顺便问阿姨馒头是不是当天早上做的。她直到最后完全忽视我的问题,收到我的钱后她几乎是扔出了我买的东西,冷漠地说:“你喜欢就拿走。”
上周我去那里买了一包馒头,我随便问了阿姨一句是不是当天早上做好的。她直到最后都没有回答我,收到我的钱后几乎是像扔一样地把东西给了我,冷漠地说:“赶快拿走"。(1.When you wrote this article,you have left there,so you should use "去“. Please pay attention to the difference of "来” and "'去”. 2. The difference of "顺便”and "随便“:“顺便”means do another thing incidentally when do a thing. For example:(1)你出门顺便把垃圾扔了好吗? (2) 我来这里出差,想到你住在这里,顺便来看看你。“随便”express a casual attitude,not very care.For example:1.Q:请问您要买什么?A:我随便看看.2.Q:你去哪里?A:我随便走走。 3. “你喜欢就拿走”is not very accurate.Because you buy"馒头”,if you don't like,you won't buy it. ”赶快拿走“ express the meaning of urging you take away quickly. it's more reasonable.)
神情不高兴的我转身出门时,那位阿姨吵吵嚷嚷地用广东话骂我。这是对客人什么样的待遇啊?(可能因为我是只会国语的人..?无论怎样我是华人,你们也是华人,那我们都是同族同胞嘛!)觉得真遗憾。
这是对客人什么样的态度啊!(对……的态度,……的待遇,“待遇”can't match with "对“。In addition,”态度“and”待遇“have different meaning.For example:服务员的态度不好。我换工作了,这家公司给我的待遇不好。)
我觉得很难过。or 我真难过!
我决定不再光顾这家卫生等级C的 “垃圾点心店”。
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