First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I call My name is Momo, is one a Chinese from Guangdong's Chinese. I manage this small clothing store now.  I like my this business. I never thought that my dreams can come true easily.  enterprise, I formerly thought that I do not have the ideal, because I thought that all happy fantasies and difficult to realize, the life work carefully and make steady progress, arrives at that step talent ponder next step, now, I not such thought that if the life has not pursued, was equal to that did not have the pleasure, does not have the pleasure life is Bai Guo, therefore, I once hoped that my spoken English can skilled blurting out, I now need to diligently, to refuel! 1

I need to work even more in deligence in improving my spoken English.

我一點都不明白你所寫的英文字句. 請先用中文來表達你的意思.讓那些会中文來準確修改你的英文作文.這样你能好学而能快速進步. 我的中文不流利.與你英文同舟.

 I don't understand what you are trying to express.  Write in Chinese so that those who know Chinese can understand what you are trying to say and correct it.  This way is the only way to learn and improve.  At the same time, I would like to know what is "Bai Guo"?  If you write something like this in Chinese, you need to write it in the target language you are writing.  Remember what you write here is for the world to read.

1.  This is one long sentence and is difficult to read and understand. 

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am Miss Momo. I am chinese and I comefrom Guangdon province. Currently I run a small clothing store. I like this enterprise. Before starting this I always thought that I do not have the idea about how to st up an enteprise. I belivedt that  happy fantasies are difficult to realize.  But if we work carefully and make steady progress, we can achive our dream. Now I do not think so.  If we persue what we want to do, and have pleasure topersu that, life will not be boaring at all. I hope learning spoken english is the same. Ihope that by blrting whaever I know I can improve my spoken English skills. Now I need to diligently follow this and refuelmyself.

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

My name is momo, a Chinese from Guangdong, China. I now own a small boutique shop.  I like my business.  I used to think that I shouldn't even think of any ideal for my live because I thought all happiness is just a fantasy and difficult to realize.  Throughout my life, I just worked carefully and making steady progress step by step and finally arrived at the step what my talent could brought me to. [The original statement is .... finally arrived at the step which the next step would require my talent to ponder. ... It is too complicate for English to express.]     Now, my thought is how much if you don't pursue in life is equal to how much you don't have in pleasure [Again this is a direct translated Chinese expression].  Life without pleasure is Bai Guo, wasted in meaningless. Therefore, I once hoped that my spoken English can be skillfully blurting out, I now I realize I need to work on it diligently, or to refuel my learning!

Comment:  Momo, your Chinese level is not bad but your English level is too low to translate the relatively high level Chinese complex expressions.  You should write it out in Chinese in a simple form then translate it to English.  For example, you have to imaging you are writing it for a 1st or 2nd grade Chinese students to understand.  You then try to translate it to English.  It will be much easier for yourself and for the readers.

Hi！我叫默默，是一个来自广东惠州的女孩，很高兴来到这里并认识新朋友。

Hi!My name is momo.I come from guangdong in Chinese,Nice to meet you in here.