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Need Correction and score for Ilets Writing task 2 WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exerciseand avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. My answer : A healthy person is the one who use to take good care of his diet and training on a daily basis. There are lots of reasons to stay healthy on my country, this is what we are going to discuss in this essay. Firstly It’s really hard to stick to your diet plan as it requires determination and passion. Most of the people who tried a diet plan , quit after a few weeks . Due to hectic busy life we are all suffering to eat junk food. We don’t have the patient or the time to prepare our own meals. It’s sad story, isn’t it? Recent studies have proven that a person he eats healthy lives more than others. At the same time they feel more active and mentally focused. Media should be part of the solution and raise the awareness about the importance of eating healthy. Government needs to participate as well by generating a campaigns for a health check up . Everyone should has a training plan at least 30 minutes a day. Unfortunately some people can’t effort to go to the GYM or have a personal trainer however a lot of YouTube videos indicate people who were able to be in a good physical shape only by training at home therefore no excuse . One of my brothers has this passion to become a fitness model so not only he stopped ordering any kind of food but learned to cook his own dish. I conclusion we all need to exercise and eat healthy to have a better and happy life.

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A healthy person is the one who takes good care of his diet and training on a daily basis. There are lots of reasons to stay healthy in my country, this is what we are going to discuss in this essay. 

Firstly, It’s really hard to stick to your diet plan as it requires determination and passion. Most of the people who tried a diet plan quit after a few weeks. Due to a/our hectic busy life we are all suffering when we eat* junk food. We don’t have the patience or the time to prepare our own meals. It’s a sad story, isn’t it?

Recent studies have proven that a person who eats healthy lives longer** than others. At the same time they feel more active and mentally focused. Media should be part of the solution and raise the awareness about the importance of eating healthy. Government needs to participate as well by generating campaigns for a health check up.

Everyone should have a training plan of at least 30 minutes a day. Unfortunately some people can’t afford*** to go to the gym or have a personal trainer, however a lot of YouTube videos indicate people who were able to be in a good physical shape only by training at home, therefore there is no excuse.

One of my brothers has this passion to become a fitness model so not only has he stopped ordering any kind of food but learned to cook his own dishes.

In conclusion we all need to exercise and eat healthy to have a better and happy life.

[* Or: "suffering by eating junk food".

** The phrase "lives more than others" is a little awkward. A better phrase is "lives a more healthy, fulfilling life than others."

*** If you actually meant to use the word "effort" the phrase would be: "some people can't make the effort to".

Remember to not have a space before the ending period of a sentence.]

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