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Have you ever thought about how technology can change our lives in the future? This is, actually, one of my favourite topics.
I used to love watching movies about technology and time travel when I was growing up and when I was 10 years old I had my first contact with the internet and there was probably not a day that I didn’t use it ‘till then. Technology is far from what I expected it to be nowadays, but it’s still pretty cool. Can you imagine talking to someone who’s on the other side of the world? In a real-time conversation? Come on! We can even share our faces in high-quality through a screen by using a camera, as if we were on a mirror - that’s insane!
I could talk about technology the whole day… We can talk about how computers can connect to each other using an invisible signal, it would be insane even if we had to use cables. Or about how fast our communication can be and how it helps so many people to fit in and make friends. Or we can just talk about how technology is changing the way people works and how we can use it in our favor.
Cars, planes, washing machines, dishwashers, television, computer, cellphones, escalator, videogames and even credit cards, technology is a bless.
Thanks to technology we can have a better life... At least for those who’s opened to the new. If you’re a narrow-minded person, technology can be a nightmare. You are probably thinking that robots will take over the world and that you’re going to lost your job because of them. Well, probably you will lose your job… but you will find a better one if you change your mind. No more 9-5 jobs, less is more, thank to technology some professionals can work less and produce better.
Of course, it has a dark side… As everything else. We have to use it consciously so it can be a nice experience. Internet, for example, you can either use it to improve your professional skills, mental health and even watch some great movies or show people everything they don’t need to know in order to feel popular, you can even be harassed by a stranger or even worse, have your data stolen.
Technology’s not your friend, is your reality. So take it and be sure to have a ball while using it.
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Have you ever thought about how technology can could change our lives in the future? This is, actually, one of my favourite topics.I used to love watching movies about technology and time travel when I was growing up. and When I was 10 years old I had my first contact with the internet and there was has probably not been a day that I didn’t use it ‘till since then. Technology is far from what I expected it to be nowadays, but it’s still pretty cool. Can you imagine talking to someone who’s on the other side of the world, in a real-time conversation? Come on! We can even share our faces in high-quality through a screen by using a camera, as if we were looking in on a mirror - that’s insane!
I could talk about technology the whole day… We can talk about how computers can connect to each other using an invisible signal, it would be insane even if we had to use cables. Or about how fast our communication can be and how it helps so many people to fit in and make friends. Or we can just talk about how technology is changing the way people works and how we can use it in our favor.
Cars, planes, washing machines, dishwashers, televisions, computers, cellphones, escalators, videogames and even credit cards, technology is a blessing.
Thanks to technology we can have a better life... At least for those who are opened to the new. If you’re a narrow-minded person, technology can be a nightmare. You are probably thinking that robots will take over the world and that you’re going to lose your job because of them. Well, probably you will lose your job… but you will find a better one if you change your mind. No more 9-5 jobs, less is more, thanks to technology some professionals can work less and produce better.
Of course, it has a dark side… As does everything else. We have to use it consciously so it can be a nice experience. The internet, for example, you can either use it to improve your professional skills, mental health and even watch some great movies or to show people everything they don’t need to know in order to feel popular, you can even be harassed by a stranger or even worse, have your data stolen.
Technology is not your friend, it is your reality. So take it and be sure to have a ball while using it.
Overall, I thought that your text was excellent. I separated one very long sentence and pasted together two others, but you made very few grammatical errors. Let me know if you have specific questions about any of the corrections.
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