No need for me to correct your entry.  I cannot do any better than Daniel's.  When I first saw the movie in the cinema, I was like you, struck dumb.  There were many times in the movie I closed my eyes!  I am a person who detest visual violence but in this case, if there are so such gory scenes, the movie itself will not be effective.  It shows the inhumane nature of man is more fearful those those of the fantasy world.  It is a great but a one time movie in my opinion because of the gory.  However I love the music, very haunting.  I even bought the soundtrack for my collection.  The movie won 3 Oscars.

Pan's Labyrinth

Today I supposed to rental many DVD's which is Daniel's recommend ones.
I thought I could pay money by my rental DVD point card, but my point was not enough to pay insted of money. (These point can use such as money)

Also i had just 100 yen (1 DVD = 100 yen) So, Today I rentaled "Pan's Labyrinth", because my good friend said me that "Please watch this movie, then lets talk about this."



Just now i have finished watching this movie....

Speechless (?)
Cannot say anything...
Does anyone watch up to now this movie ??

This movie was in the Fantasy shelf of DVD rental shop. I do not want to believe that this story is FANTASY!!!
Too sad.
Too bad ending.
i can say that reflexion was amazing. It was beautiful.

I dont know how to explain about this movie even i want to explain. lol

please let me know if you watched this one, or you already watched this movie:)

Thanks for reading my note:)
have a nice day^^

keiko

Pan's Labyrinth

Today I was supposed to rent many DVD's which Daniel recommend to me.
I thought I could pay with my rental DVD point card, but I didn't have enough points. 

We need to write this sentence in simple past tense.

Rental is a noun. For example: "I don't own this DVD, it is a rental."

I had just 100 yen (1 DVD = 100 yen) so I rented "Pan's Labyrinth" because my good friend told me, "please watch it, then let's talk about it."

I just finished watching the movie....  (You can use "the" in this case because your audience knows that you are talking about one specific movie [definite object])

I am speechless. I cannot say anything. Up until now, has anyone watched this movie?

This movie was on the Fantasy shelf of DVD rental shop. I do not want to believe that this story is FANTASY!!!

[We put things ON a shelf. We put things IN a box.]

Too sad.
Such a bad ending. [Saying "too bad" is a bit awkward. You should replace is with "such a" or use an adjective such as "terrible" or "horrible."

However, I can say that the reflection was amazing. It was beautiful.

I dont know how to explain this movie even though I want to. lol

Please let me know if you have seen this movie. :) 

Thanks for reading my note. :)

Have a nice day^^

keiko

You can express yourself in English quite well, but you are redundant with some vocabulary and grammar. You can use simple sentences to say a lot! Keep it simple and keep practicing!