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The view from my office’s window.
It’s spring now, and through the wide window, I can see a couple of cherry trees growing on the right side of the building I work in. ("company's premises" sounds unnatural or too formal). They’re waving, blown by a cold spring wind, which is still cold. Sometimes a few flowers fly off the waving branches. The grey and humid concrete in front of our manufacturing site, as well as the wooden pallets stacked in the front to be used with a forklift, are covered with pink and white petals. (saying both "are covered" and "spread around" sounds unnecessary. I'd take one off). Not really a romantic view to be honest, but for sure a weird and unusual one. (<-- Nice sentence!)
The company is settled in a village at the very beginning of the Alps, so from the window, I can see the small mountains around here covered with forests and lightened by the sunlight. (<-- Nice sentence!) It’s still the very beginning of spring, so the chestnut and oaks trees in which this mountains’ side are covered, are dry and colourless after the winter.
From here I can also see a few houses, part of the local village, and a small parking lot full of cars. I can hear the church bell ringing, a toll for 1 pm. From my seat, I can’t actually see the bell tower, which is a little bit further on the right. This village has a nice, silent, and round based Church with a high white tower, but to be honest I can’t remember who this Church is dedicated to. I pass by there sometimes during lunch break in the summer and stop for a while: sitting in it’s surreal, chilly, silence. The heat and noise coming from outside seem like things from another planet.
Finally, on the mountainside, I can see a big old and ugly house, with creamy colour painted walls, brown windows and doors, and a sad regular rectangular shape. It has a pine tree, probably a larch, on the left side of the front and a tall telecommunications antenna, that’s probably used for cellular connection in this area.
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Paolo, you're English seems advanced so a few of my changes are actually just suggestions to help make it sound more natural (at least to me). You're taking on some advanced and descriptive writing here. Very nice! Keep at it!
I hope this helps, and thanks for the corrections on my post. Ciao!
The view from my office's window.
It’s spring now, so through the wide window I can see a couple of cherry trees, growing on the right side of the company's premises. They’re waving, blown by a spring cold spring wind, which is still cold. [That last clause is redundant, but not ungrammatical.] Sometimes a few flowers fly off from the waving branches. The grey, humid, concrete in front of our manufacturing site, as well as the wooden pallets stacked in the front to be used with a forklift, are covered with pink and white petals spread around. Not really a romantic view, to be honest, but for sure a weird and unusual one.The company is settled in a village at the very beginning of the Alps, so from the window I can see the small mountains around here, covered with forests, lightened by the sunlight. It’s still the very beginning of spring, so the chestnut and oaks trees that cover the mountainside are dry and colourless after the winter.
From here I can see also see a few houses, part of the local village, and a small parking lot full of cars. I can hear the church bell ringing, a toll for 1 pm, but from my seat I can’t actually see the bell tower, which is a little bit further on the right. This village has a nice, silent, round based church with an high white tower, but to be honest I can’t remember who this church is dedicated to. I pass there sometimes during lunch break in summer and stop for a while; sitting in its surreal, chilly, silence the heat and the noises coming from outside seem like things from another planet.
Finally, on the mountainside, I can see a big old and ugly house, with creamy colour painted walls, brown windows and doors and a sad regular rectangular shape. There is a pine tree, probably a larch, on the left side of the front and a tall telecommunications antenna, that’s probably used for cellular connection in this area.
Very well written, Paolo. Great use of detail to convey intimacy with the setting.
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