First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I think English is the best language in the world...

So I really want to learn English... and then I hope I'll be able to work and live in another country... It is marvleous would be marvelous, isn't wouldn't it??

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I think English is the best language in the world, so  I'd really like to improve my English skills/ability.  I hope that someday I'll be able to live and work in another country.  That would be (pretty) exciting, wouldn't it??

올바른 주두점을 사용해 주세요. 우리가좋은친구가되길바래요.  여기에서제친구들과 열심히공부하고 있어요. 이건저에게아주큰도전이에요. 우리는배우기가열심해요.   둘은서로의에세이가항상수정해볼거예요. 우리가  서로의글을꾸준히수정해주면우정이계속될수있어요. 당신의영어능력을향상할수있다면, 전계속수정할거에요.하루에에세이하나씩만써주세요.  그거면충분해요. 양보다질이더중요해요.   짧은글을쓰면(쓰시다면/ 쓰려면), 드릴게요 / 고쳐드릴게요.   다른에세이를  곧쓸거에요.봐주시면감사하겠어요.

그건대문자로써야합니다. 

바꿔쓸수있는표현, 또는나의추천입니다. 

이건더자연스럽거나더일반적인방법의표현입니다.

오타, 또는수정이필요한부분그리고단어의순서, 단어의선택이나철자를고쳤습니다. 

밑줄을있을때, 맞은구두점과띄어쓰기를사용해주세요.       

보라색  제코멘트입니다.               

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