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the Old Summer Palace During time in Beijing, I had been to visit the Old Summer Palace. My previous impression of this place just came from the books and movies. Walking in this garden myself, I could feel a strong comparison, the lonely ruin stand still surrounded by great overgrown trees, seemed speak something to people passed by. Looking around, no building is undamaged. From these ruin, you still can imange how glory they were. I didn't know what the inside feeling of these aggressors when they plundered recklessly and set fire here. Did they even feel a little guilt? I do not want to write more ont how cruel aggressors are. Everyone have known this fact already. When I saw recovery model what this place look like before destroying, I was totally astonished. How big work it was. The emperors really knew how to enjoy their life. How many ancient Chinese people had joined in this work and how many of them had died in this work? How many broken families at that time? How many sad stories? I still remembered this scene in the movie, when the French and British soldiers attacked Beijing, the emperor just ran away with his wifies regardless of normal people's life. Gunpowder was invented by Chinese people and in the emperor's penetralium where put the advanced firearm, but they just didn't make use of these. The ruler just had a short eye sight, putting much energy on how to enjoy the life, never thought the danger from outside. As Confucius says, 人无远虑,必有近忧。(A man without distant care must have near sorrow, is this right which I found on the Internet) So for a county or a person, if we don't do anything to improve ourself and just seek ease and comfort life. No matter how strong you was, you will be beaten by the following. That is what we can learn from history, the high pay history.

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The Old Summer Palace

While I was in Beijing, I visited the Old Summer Palace. My previous impressions of this place just came from books and movies. Walking in this garden myself, I could feel a strong emotion(?). the lonely ruins stand still, surrounded by great overgrown trees, seeming to say something to people who pass by. Looking around, no building is undamaged. From these ruins, you still can imange how glorious they were. I didn't know what the inside feelings of these aggressors were, when they plundered recklessly and set fires here. Did they even feel a little guilt? 

I do not want to write more on how cruel the aggressors were. Everyone knowns this fact already. When I saw a recreated model of what this place looked like before being destroyed, I was totally astonished. How big a work it was. The emperors really knew how to enjoy their life. How many ancient Chinese people had joined in this work and how many of them had died in this work? How many broken families were there at that time? How many sad stories? I still remember a scene from the movie, when the French and British soldiers attacked Beijing; the emperor just ran away with his wives without regard for normal peoples' lives. Gunpowder was invented by the Chinese people and in the emperor's penetralium there were advanced firearms, but they just didn't make use of them. The ruler was short sighted, putting much too energy intoto enjoying life, and never thought of the danger from outside. As Confucius says, 人无远虑,必有近忧(if you dont' plan for the future, you will have trouble soon). 

So for a county or a person, if we don't do anything to improve ourself and just seek an  easy and comfortable life, no matter how strong we were, we will be beaten by what follows. That is what we can learn from history, the high price of history.

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Very beautiful, I corrected a few things (didn't need much), while trying to keep the wording that you were going for as much as possible. The only word I didn't understand was 'comparison', didn't seem to make sense in that context.

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