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Writing Email Dear colleagues Every morning I take my lunch box to our work place and put it into the southern side refrigerator. Recently, I am processing a diet plan for my lunch, so I made a special meal to myself. My lunch box is yellow, and I put my name label on the cover. I think it is very easy to recognize. Last few days, when I opened my lunch box, I found somebody had eaten part of the meal. I am very angry of this. The size of the lunch was calculated. I only can eat half of it. Furthermore, I am on a diet, I do not have other option to eat outside. As a result, I feel very hungry at afternoon. I hope someone could stop eating my lunch. I already talk to our manager, he advises me to write this mail as a warning. If this happened again, I would ask our security guard to look the monitor and see who eat this. Thank you Tim

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(Part One)

Writing an Email

Dear colleagues,

Every morning, I take my lunch box to our work place my workplace and put it into the southern side refrigerator. Recently, I am processing trying out a diet plan for my lunch, so I made a special meal to for myself. My lunch box is yellow, and I put pasted my name label on the cover. I think it is very (1) conspicuous. easy to recognize

Last For the last few days, when I opened my lunch box, I found that somebody had eaten a part of the my meal. I am very angry about this. The portion size of the my lunch was calculated. I could only can eat half of it. Furthermore, I am on a diet, so I did not have (2) another other option to buy my lunch. eat outside. As a result, I felt very hungry in the afternoon. 

I hope someone could stop eating my lunch. I (3) have already spoken to our manager, and he advised me to write this email as a warning. (4) If this happens again, I would will ask our the security guard to look at the monitor closed-circuit television and see who ate my lunch.  eat this

Thank you,
Tim

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(Part Two)

Hi Hsin, 

Just some suggestions for your writing:

(1) We use the word "recognize" to mean that we identify something based on prior experience or knowledge. Your colleagues may not have seen your lunch box previously; therefore, I have decided to use "conspicuous" to mean something that is highly visible or noticed.

(2) We use "other" to refer to another thing of a different kind; we use "another" to refer to another thing of the same kind. In your case, it was an option to buy another meal which is different from your option of consuming your self-made meal. 

(3) We use the present perfect tense (i.e. have spoken) to express the idea that the action took place in the past but the effect of that action is still ongoing. In addition, I changed your "talked" to "spoken" to describe the more specific meaning of verbally communicating with someone to express one's opinions and position.

(4) You are referring to a likely condition in the future which is a first conditional sentence. First conditional sentences are commonly constructed as: If .... (present tense), ....... will (bare infinitive).

Example: If you take my money again, I will report you to the police.

* There is a phrase which I have italicised and highlighted in blue. I am afraid I do not understand what you meant.

 I hope this helps.

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Writing Email

Dear colleagues

Every morning I take my lunch box to our work place and put it into in the southern south side of the refrigerator. Recently, I am processing following a diet plan for my lunch, and so I made make a special meals to for myself. My lunch box is yellow, and I put my name label on the cover. I think it is very easy to recognize.

Last A few days ago, when I opened my lunch box, I found somebody had eaten part of the {my} meal. I am very angry of about this. The size of the lunch was calculated. I only can eat half of it. Furthermore, I am on a diet, I do not have other options to eat outside. As a result, I feel very hungry at by the afternoon.

I hope someone could would stop eating my lunch. I already talk to our manager, and he advises advised me to write this email as a warning. If this happened happens again, I would will ask our security guard to look the monitor {monitoring system} and to see who is eating it {my lunch}. eat this.

Thank you
Tim


Very well written. I hope your email resolves the issue!

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