IELTS TASK 1: Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
These charts compare how water is used in six areas of the world, shown in percent.
It is clear that water in Asia, Africa and South America is primarily used for agriculture, while in North America and Europe more water was used for industrial purpose.
Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that agricultural water consumption accounts for more than 80% of total water usage in Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia, followed by South America's agriculture which accounts slightly less water consumption, for 71% of total water usage. Water used for agriculture is the second largest source of water consumption in Europe and North America, taking up 32% and 39% respectively.
By contrast, industrial use takes up the majority of water used in Europe and North America, at 53% and 48%, while the proportion of industrial use in the other regions take up less than 10%. The proportion of domestic use in the Americas and Europe is more than 10%, higher than African or Asian areas.
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These charts compare how water is used in six areas of the world, measured expressed/shown* in proportion percent**.
It is clear that water in Asia, Africa and South America is*** primarily used for agriculture, while in North America and Europe it is*** primarily used for industry (or: for industrial purposes).
Looking at the information in more
detail, we can see that agricultural water consumption accounts for
more than 80% of total water usage in Africa, Central Asia and South
East Asia, followed by South America which accounts for 71% of total
water usage. Water used for agriculture is the second largest water
consumption in Europe and North America, taking up 32% and 39%
respectively.
By contrast, industrial use takes up the majority
of water used in Europe and North America, at 53% and 48%, while the
proportion of industrial use in the rest other regions takes up less than 10%. The
proportion of domestic use in North and South America (or: the Americas) and Europe accounts for above is more than 10%,
exhibiting higher proportion than Africa, Central or South East Asia areas.
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* A percentage isn't a measurement of a quantity.
** Technically, a percentage is a kind of proportion (n/100 or n:100) but the charts are shown in percent, so it's better to use the same terminology.
*** The rest of the text uses the present tense, so it should be consistent throughout.
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IELTS TASK 1: Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
These charts compare the purposes of using water in six areas of the world, measured in proportion.It is clear that the largest proportion of water was used on agriculture in Asia, Africa and South America, the largest proportion of water was used in agriculture while that of in North America and Europe more water was used for industrial usepurposes. (use here is fine, but I added in another "used" in the previous edit, so changing it to "purposes" allows you to not repeat yourself).
Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that agricultural water consumption accounts for more than 80% of total water usage in Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia. followed by South America's agriculture which accounts slightly less water usage, for 71% of total water usage. (The problem in the previous sentence is that you use the phrase "followed by" but the subject of your sentence didn't establish that there was some kind of order you were talking about). Water used for agriculture is the second largest source of water consumption in Europe and North America, takes taking up 32% and 39% respectively.
By contrast, industrial use takes up the majority of water used in Europe and North America, at 53% and 48%, while the proportion of industrial use in the rest of the world takes up less than 10%. The proportion of domestic use in America and Europe accounts for above 10%, exhibiting higher proportion than African and or Asian areas.
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