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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and community are become more isolated.
The effect or the internet on people is becoming increasingly controversial among people day by day. Most of people believe that the internet provides a change for meeting new people from all the walks of life. The rest of the people claim that we have been manipulated by the internet by staying away from the public. This essay will discuss both of sides deeply.
The first of all, people have an opportuniy to communicate with people from all around the world by using social network such as Facebook, İnstagram. Those applications provide a chance to people to interact with their friends and parents. İn addition, people who want to make friends can use this channels in order to make real their wishes. For instance, resently years, researchs related to the internet demonstrate that people that use the social media have more friends than others. For these reason, the internet is significant for human life.
On the other hand, people tend to spent a lot of time on the internet every single day and it causes dramatic problem. They become more silence and shy, because of usage of the internet. Moreover they are probably to stop connection with the others. As a result, it will end up being alone among communities. For example, if the children who prefer to spend time computer than friends he will lose his friends. Because friendship need a care. İn lights of this we are affected negatively and couses lost of friends.
İn conclusion, the wage of internet is argumentative among humans. This essay argued How does the internet help people to be closer and what is the negative effects on humanity. İn my opinion, people will increasingly continue to use this without break.
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On the other hand, people tend to spend a lot of time on the internet every single day and //it causes/ this can cause// a dramatic problem. They become more silentce and shy, //because of usage of the internet/(bence daha doğal:) from using internet so much//. Moreover they are probably ceasing to have face to face contact to stop connection with the others. As a result, they it will end up being lonely alone among communities. For example, if the children who prefer to spend time on the computer rather than with friends they will lose them his friends. Because friendship needs to be cared for a care. İn lights of this we are affected negatively and [bunu anlamadım. Belki: 'could lose friends'] couses lost of friends.
İn conclusion, the consequences of internet are a source of discussion wage of internet is argumentative among humans. This essay //argued/discussed// Hhow does the internet helps people to be closer and what is the negative effects on humanity are. İn my opinion, people will increasingly continue to use it this without taking a break.
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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and community are becoming more isolated.The effect of the internet on people is becoming increasingly controversial among people day by day. Most of people believe that the internet provides //a chance/ an opportunity// for meeting new people from all the walks of life. The rest [gerekli değil: of the people ] claim that we have been manipulated by the internet [bunu anlamadım: by staying away from the public. Belki 'into avoiding face to face encounters' demek istiyordun]. This essay will discuss both of sides in depth deeply.
The First of all, people have an opportunity to communicate with //people/others// from all around the world by using a social network such as Facebook, İnstagram. Those applications provide a chance //to/ bence daha doğal: for// people to interact with their friends and parents. İn addition, people who want to make friends can use these this channels in order to make //real their wishes/bence daha doğal: their wishes real//. For instance, in recent resently years, researchs related to the internet has demonstrated that people that use the social media have more friends than //others/those who don't//. For these reasons, the internet is significant for human life.
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