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please native English speakers help review this essay. thank your very much. Some people argue that due to the advanced of communication technologies, there is no need to write letters anymore. I personally disagree it and in this essay, I will explain that although modern communications have transformed the ways in which we contact and interact with people, they are no substitute for letter writing/handwritten letters. (Or Explain why letter writing still matters in an age of digital communication. --> optional, just want ideas if this is better) Firstly, a written letter bears more affections, which represents the writer is more serious about writing it. Therefore, the reader is likely to consider that the information contained in it is more trustworthy. This is a good practice when it comes to proposing, apologizing and applying for critical positions in an organization. Secondly, a paper-based letter can also be treated as a memorable gift if the writer and reader are in close relationships because it is touchable and every word in it can be seen as part of the writer. Lastly, written letters are hard to be replicated, which makes it safer compared to any digital information that risks being hacked and copied. In summary, while modern communications are easier, cheaper and more convenient, they are no substitute for letter writing, for it is emotional, touchable and safe.

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Some people argue that due to the advancement of communication technologies, there is no need to write letters anymore.

I agree with all of the first corrections, with one edit. "Advanced" should be "advancement."

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please native English speakers help review this essay. thank your very much.

Some people argue that due to the advanced of communication technologies, there is no need to write letters anymore. I personally disagree with that and in this essay, I will explain that although modern communications have transformed the ways in which we contact and interact with people, they are no substitute for letter writing and handwritten letters.

(Or Explain why letter writing still matters in an age of digital communication. --> optional, just want ideas if this is better)

Firstly, a written letter is more personal bears more affections, which signifies that represents the writer is more serious about writing it. Therefore, the reader is likely to consider that the information contained in it is more trustworthy. This is a good practice when it comes to proposing, apologizing and applying for a job.  critical positions in an organization.  (I'm not sure what you meant, and I think another example would be better.  I think it is more appropriate to apply for a job in print rather than writing).

Secondly, a handwritten letter can also be treated as a memorable gift if the writer and reader are in a close relationships because it is tangible touchable and every word in it can be seen as part of the writer.


Lastly, written letters are hard to be replicated, which makes it safer compared to any digital information that risks being hacked and copied.

In summary, while modern communications are easier, cheaper and more convenient, they are no substitute for letter writing, for it is emotional, tangible and safe.

Aaron- you're a great writer!! I changed a couple grammatical issues and phrases that make it sound more natural.  I changed 'touchable' for 'tangible', it means the same thing but when referring to something that can be touched (like a book instead of an e-reader) I think tangible works better. :) Good job!


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