D o you think cardless society is realistic and why? What are the advantages and disadvantages?
The topic of whether cardless society is realistic or not has been a controversial debate, while some people think it is has a negative impact on our society, but I am convinced that cardless society is a must of the development and it certainly has more advantages than disadvantages.
I do admit that there are some arguments suggesting cardless society would be an incubator for cyber-crime. There are more cases where personal information security and credit card fraud has been reported. In addition to this, senior people may find it very struggling as they are not used to the new method of payment, for instance, they may have trouble using Uber instead of getting a taxi like the old-fashioned way.
However, there is no doubt that our society has witnessed an enormous change of consumer behavior from buying stuff at retail store in the shopping center to shop online with a few clicks and the goods will be delivered to your home address. Some countries have already become cardless such as China, 90% of the daily money transactions have been done on the smartphone apps including pay utilities, medical care, food and groceries and etc. With the reduction of the cash economy and tax evasion, cardless society has definitely increase transaction clarity. Furthermore, thanks to the technology that the convenience we embracing now would inevitably help boost the economy.'
In conclusion, I think the advantages have outweighed the disadvantages, and there is no doubt that our society would be beneficial from the cashless revolution.
Search from various English teachers...
Corrections · 3
0
There are other problems with a cashless society. "cyber-crime" is not really an issue if the technology is implemented properly. But the people who run the technology have greater power over society as a result of the cashless technology and society must determine if they are responsible enough to not abuse this power. Further, depending on the country and social issues, a cashless society can discriminate against the poor or people who have been put at any kind of a disadvantage. For instance, America has a greater proportion of its population incarcerated than any country in the world. I would not trust a cashless society here because, the banks are corrupt, the government is corrupt, the prisons are for-profit, and a cashless society would discriminate against the poor and people who had been unjustly incarcerated. Lastly, I do not think there is a reason to presume that cashless technology would boost the economy. It is more convenient, but it is not necessarily more productive.
0
However, there is no doubt that our society has witnessed an enormous change of in consumer behavior from buying stuff at retail stores in the shopping centers to shopping online with a few clicks and the goods will be/are delivered to your home address.
("stuff" is very informal here. "things" is better, "products" is
probably even better here. I took out "the" because there's no "the"
before retail stores. The issue is consistency in how the example of
consumer behavior is described. So for instance "buying" as the same
tense as "shopping online" "shopping center" is a separate thing here.
You could also say "from buying things at a retail store in a shopping
center to shopping online..." "will be" or "are" are both okay I
think. It's sort of ongoing thing, so "are" might be good too.) Some countries have already become cardless such as China: 90% of the daily money transactions have been/are being done on the smartphone apps including paying utilities, medical care, food and groceries and etc.
(Without a specific time reference for this statistic, "are being"
sounds better, like it's an ongoing situation. "In the past, 20% of our
sales have been from these customers. "paying utilities" sounds like an
activity, "pay utilities" sounds like "pay to play games" or
something. "money" is unnecessary here.)With the reduction of the cash economy and tax evasion, a cardless society has definitely increased transaction claritytransparency. (This
sentence is very unclear. "clarity" definitely isn't the right word
here. "transparency" might imply transparency to the government. I.e.,
the government can track transactions better and prevent tax evasion.
But normally "transparency" is used for other things. For instance
"government transparency" would mean that the government allows the
people to know what it is doing and why. "corporate transparency" means
that corporations disclose their financial statements, maybe disclose
potentially harmful things in products, etc.. You should rework this
sentence to clarify its meaning.) Furthermore, thanks to the technology, that of the convenience we are embracing now would will inevitably help boost the economy.'(So
this is not a specific technology, so I took out "the". "embracing" is
a little strange here. "Because we have embraced cashless technology,
our economy will be boosted. "embrace" is a kind of full acceptance, in
the way it is used here.)
In conclusion, I think the advantages have outweighed the disadvantages, and there is no doubt that our society would be beneficialbenefitted from the cashless revolution. (or "the advantages outweigh the disadvantages"... it's okay in the past tense here, but I'm not sure why one would use the past tense in this case. Seemingly the advantages and disadvantages, at least some of them, are still present.)
In conclusion, I think the advantages have outweighed the disadvantages, and there is no doubt that our society would be beneficialbenefitted from the cashless revolution. (or "the advantages outweigh the disadvantages"... it's okay in the past tense here, but I'm not sure why one would use the past tense in this case. Seemingly the advantages and disadvantages, at least some of them, are still present.)
0
Do you think a cardless society is realistic and why? What are the advantages and disadvantages?
The topic of whether a cardless society is realistic or not has been a controversial debate; while some people think it is has a negative impact on our society, but I am convinced that a cardless society is a must of the development and it certainly has more advantages than disadvantages.("while" and "but" sound strange together. "While she prefers Mexican food, I like Italian." "She prefers Mexican food, but I like Italian." The semi-colon helps break up a long sentence, you could also have a period. "a cardless society" because it is a kind of general concept or potential ideal. You could sort of use it without the article "a" but it sounds a little awkward. You could say "the cardless society" if you wanted to talk about it as an established thing. The word "realistic" here suggests potentiality. I.e., could a cardless society exist; not is a cardless society a good thing.)I do admit that there are some arguments suggesting a cardless society would be an incubator for cyber-crime. There are more cases where personal information has been stolen/compromised security and credit card fraud has been reported.("security" as a word is strange here; you see I changed it to two distinct phrases regarding the types of security issues.) In addition to this, senior/older people may find it very struggling a struggle as they are not used to the new method of payment; for instance, they may have trouble using Uber instead of getting a taxi like the old-fashioned way. ("seniors" can be used instead of "older people". "senior people" is okay though. "like" is okay also but unnecessary here and it's clearer without.)
Want to progress faster?
Join this learning community and try out free exercises!
Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!
Start Learning Today
